Awwwww that was really sweet! I love the concept of the story, where you chose to ignore the chaos of the show to focus on a small aspect Jackson and Chloe's relationship: Jackson's observant nature. I've never been in a relationship, but I know that I would want my future boyfriend(s) to be as observant as Jackson, because what girl doesn't get all warm and fuzzy inside when a guy notices the small things about her that shouldn't be that important but really are, am I right?

Also, bravo on the word usage and descriptions, especially when you described the eyes. For some reason, that just stood out to me, and the way that you described them came across as intimate and soft, which is what you were going for in the first place, but those descriptions highlighted those qualities even more.

But I think what impressed me more was the way you connected Jackson's background in animal behavior to human relationships. I never would have thought that his observant nature towards animals would affect the way he interacted with others, namely his girlfriend. Your idea was very original! Great job!