Bon chapitre

Harry received a firebolt for Christmas from Sirius as his nimbus 2000 crashed into whomping willow.

Another mistake in this Ch: Ch. 5 When you had the twins place their bet, the 37g, 13s, and 3k, was all the money they had. You forgot the 60g they got from the earlier bet, that Gabrielle gave them. So the first amont you stated of being all they had was not right.

I think I found a mistake in this ch. Ch. 3 that is. You stated that when the Weasleys first arrived one of the twins mention that they couldn't go back through the floo, because they didn't have any more powder, and that the time was almost up on what they used to get there, and it was getting hot. Then later you have all the boys to get the floo powder that had mysteriously appeared in George's pocket to go to the Burrow, and then you have the arrival scene. I think that you got confused some where in there.

I really like this story so far. I have some criticisms about the characterization of Harry, but the fact that I bothered to write them shows how the author drew me in. This is a fun easy read and I look forward to he next chapter.

Harry knows he hurt Gabrielle, but he ‘just can’t’ talk to her. At this point he moves from emotionally repressed to high maintenance drama queen.

So Harry’s being an idiot again. He’s been very clearly informed of the damage he can do to his magic but does it anyway.

Harry and his friends were incredibly stupid in this chapter. They broke the chain of custody of the goblet, making them natural suspects if there are problems with a life and death tournament. They could have done the exact same joke without tampering with an ancient magical, and most important dangerous, artifact.

Both Arthur’s and the twins behavior at the Dursleys is atrocious. Six months in Azkaban sounds right. Of course the Dursleys should get 20 years for what they’ve done to Harry.

This is a pretty good story. There's enough interesting things happening to keep me going and although the writing is a little simple it's pretty good.

I'm not mad about the idea of aging Gabrielle up purely because you prefer her to Fleur but it's not a deal-breaker. Let's see where things go from here. Thanks for writing it.

I really enjoy this story, specifically your work on Gabrielle's character. Personally this is my favorite of your 3 stories and I hope you work on this one more.

Regardless, thank you for writing.

Nice workj on this chapter, and an awesome pay-off with the kiss!

Just wanted to say I love the story and can't wait for it to continue.

This story is quite awesome too I especially like the Dumbledore of the story and the conflict between Hermione and Harry is quite interesting too. I dont think I read a story where Harry stopped being friends with Hermione in 4th year without the whole 'betreyal if the light' trope being used the fact that you didnt need to change her character much for it to be belivable is also interesting. Thanks for sharing and update soon!

Awesome