Wow

8:26 am

Really like the PoV change to Linus. Very interested in the drama between him and Sally. The whole Mark thing was interesting.

This is really good!

Adorable

10:56 am

Amazing

7:05 am

This man really said sit on my face. Schroeder is an absolute goon. I respect it.

Awwwww

10:51 am

This is a review for Chapter 5 which got edited and re put back up I think.

There was a couple of grammatical and spelling errors within this chapter but nothing super egregious.

"But I do know it didn't went well" went should be replaced with "go".

"Charlie Brown is used to defeat on the field but realizing that it was used as leverage to impress his sister is something else of a mockery." Here you could just go "was a mockery" or "was nothing short of a mockery" to make the sentence more grammatically correct.

"For a while we saw Mark picking her up at school, or just around in other baseball games, until they're not." The phrase "Until they're not" should be replaced with "until he wasn't" because Mark is the subject of the sentence.

A lot of your use of "were" can be replaced with "was" in many instances as well. I think a lot of the errors were word choice but I understood the message so no big deal. I enjoyed this chapter and the progress of the relationship of the other characters. I love me some relationship drama, what can I say. I also like the reference to "You're a good man" Charlie brown with the never fall in love with a musician.

Impressive

12:26 pm

You painted an interesting picture of an older peanuts gang. They are all nearly the same outside of Lucy who has softened up. I'm always a sucker for the peanuts gang growing older.

This was a cute little story. Never was a huge fan of the Schroeder/Lucy pairing but the characterization of Lucy was interesting. Thank you for writing.

Adorable

Wow

Nice

Awwwwwwww