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Your Feedback/Grading for Assignment #6

Examiner: Amber

Grade: 19.5/20 - O (Outstanding)

Feedback: "You wrote Ron perfectly here. I feel like you captured him nicely, and his awkwardness coupled well with his goodness. Pansy was great too. She had the snark we so often see, but she felt softer (in a believable way). Descriptions were good and set the scene perfectly. I've seen the dark/grey character needs protection from a light family after someone switches sides, and, as much as I love this trope, I feel like the plot wasn't terribly original, though I think the pairing was. I also love that you focused on such a sweet, innocent moment. That was unique to me. Ron and Pansy interacted well here. Given the circumstances, they behaved in a completely believable manner. Pacing was great. Each moment flowed and transitioned well, and it didn't feel rushed or dragging. Dialogue and prose were perfectly balanced. The prompt was used clearly and originally. There was a repeated emphasis on the snow, so it was definitely explored in depth. I like that the plot seemed simple on the surface, but there were layers of depth throughout. Having Pansy need protection, the vulnerability, etc all came together to make this such an interesting, detailed plot. I didn't spot any plot holes, and everything felt resolved. I was not expecting to love this ship so much, but here we are. Sign me up. You made this so easy to love, even though I'm such a stubborn Romione shipper. You balanced hopefulness with just the right amount of sadness, and that just added to the perfection. This would appeal to anyone who loves a good Slytherin redemption story, or anyone who enjoys a sweet, hopeful beginning for a pairing. Spelling and grammar were good. There was one instance of a run-on sentence that needed a semicolon instead of a comma, but it wasn't major enough to deduct"

This was great. Your Pansy was so raw and vulnerable. I love how Ron was the one to break through her icy exterior and get through to her. I enjoy the idea of Molly and the rest of the family taking her in despite where her loyalties previously lay, because of course Molly would never see a child out on the street.

The part about Pansy seeing women and children die and all of their blood being the same regardless of what she'd been brought up to believe was especially haunting and really inspiring to read.

Great work! I really enjoyed this.

I enjoyed reading the story - I've never been a fan of how people write Pansy before, but I love the way you wrote her. You've got her more in character than I've ever read her and I like her portrayal. I also like how you write Ron. He's one of my most disliked characters, but I liked him in this story, I like how it was this mutual understanding of some of the things that Pansy was going through, showing that it didn't matter how they were brought up, and which side they were on: They could still have the same experiences.

The plot flowed nicely and it was nice use of the Burrow as a setting, you tied it in nicely. Awesome story!

Okay, the last line was perfect! So cute! And the whole idea that Pansy would come to live with the Weasley (because she defected from Voldemort's side) was inspirational. Everyone deserves a redemption arc, and you gave Pansy one that made me see her in a whole new light. At first, I didn't see the connection between Ron and Pansy (I'm a diehard Romione fan), but I understand. It's 'opposites attract,' kinda, because Ron lets his emotions run rampant while Pansy keeps them all locked inside of her. They balance each other out, and it was perfect.

I’ve never experienced Ron/Pansy before but did actually enjoy this. I liked the set up, and how you took the time to tell, in little snippets, why Pansy was at the Burrow and why she had defected Sometimes “Enemies to Loves” tropes feel thrown together, but this was done in a way that didn’t feel too bare OR too expository for the fic length, which was nice. I was curious why she seemed to indicate liking the twins near the end (despite the pranking), but that may have just been a side effect of the length because we didn’t get to see the interactions she had with them. Even so, everything still flowed nicely, and I think that focusing on this one scene was more beneficial to maintaining the mood and the emotional arc. Redemption arcs give me life, and it was nice to see Pansy in the role. Well done!

Oh look, you've gone and made me ship it. Haven't ever read or considered RonPansy before, but after such a sweet little tale how could I not?
Pansy is not a character I've personally seen redeemed all that often, but you've done it wonderfully. Both she and Ron were completely in character, and all of their actions made so much sense.
It was such a beautiful little scene and I really love how you wrote it, too.

I've never stopped to consider RonPansy before. It was interesting.

I like that his mum may not have liked Pansy, but she wasn't about to let a child get hurt. And it seemed like Pansy still managed to act haughtily by getting into arguments with Ginny and Hermione. I am a bit curious as to what happens to Pansy when they go back to school.

I love the idea of Harry buying Ron a Nimbus. I'm here for Harry because a good friend.

Even with the a/n, I was still a little foggy on when this actually happened. It seemed like 6th year, but I couldn't really tell. But man, I felt for Pansy; putting her life at risk and having to allow someone to hide her, someone she was raised to hate, would be a lot on a person. I'm glad to see that Pansy was effected by it.

The night fly was cute and sweet. Well done.

I really liked Ron and Pansy's conversation and getting to see the two of them come to understand each other a little bit better. Your characterization of Pansy here drew me in and made me want to see more of her standing up to her mother. I have so many questions about how she finally came to see that her family was wrong.

Though I would have liked a bit more detail about what Fred and George's prank was, as I got a little confused as to what exactly happened there, that didn't ultimately take away from enjoying the fic.

Ron/Pansy is a ship I'd never read before, but I think you did a good job showing the beginnings of how they could get together.

This was really cute! I’ve never encountered this pairing before, and you did it in an interesting way. I wasn’t too convinced on the Weasleys taking her in until you said the bit about Molly being unable to refuse helping a child in need. The progression of Ron and Pansy’s relationship was really nicely done, too. I was really kinda worried you’d make them kiss at the end, I think it would’ve felt too forced and rushed, so I’m really glad you ended it the way you did. You left just enough longing and intermediate space for it to feel natural and lead into more. Overall, really nicely done!

Okay, this was well thought out as to why Pansy was there to begin with. I really find it be such a Molly thing, taking in stray kids, even if they are Slytherin or pureblood or a tad but nasty, the Burrow is still a safe haven.

Ok, now for the fluffy fluff. I don't know why, but Pansy's reaction to flying on the broom seems so fitting. A little scared, but not wanting to come off as weak. And, it gives reasons to hug the other person.

Oh, how I picture the twins spying on them from their window and teasing the heck out of Ron about it the next day. I am starting to like this pairing the more I read them.

So cute