Story started pretty entertaining and very cute and I enjoyed the pregnancy aspect, but it was a little too canon for my tastes. The last 10 chapters were very dull w/ the battle scenes and I kept waiting for Sasuke to do something, anything, to get Naruko back. The karin aspect was souring me and then realizing an unhappy ending just kind of confirmed the sourness. Overall, it was kinda of a hard read if i'm honest, I did enjoy some of the moments but character interactions felt stale at times and about half way through I was struggling to get through the rest. Overall a great fic, I love the dedication to Naruko characterization. Hope your doing well!

Can't express it in words... How much i love this story...

I read this story a while back but it was incomplete at the time but it is a very good story so I’m rereading it to finish it now that the story has been completed. My only issue is it’s bouncing back-and-forth between some of them knowing she is female and others should be able to know from their abilities but don’t mention it otherwise it’s a very good story

Trying and failing to see the English that this is supposedly written in.

I actually enjoyed the first chapter; although it could use quite a bit of work. My biggest issue is the sharp and drastic turn of Point of View versus Perspective that you used from the second chapter onward. Most of it felt like it was a stream of consciousness style; and could ultimately use a re-write, which is something I would be interested in.

Either way, this story has some potential; but I find it difficult to read any further.

Please do not let that dissuade you from practicing your craft. If you would be interested in a Collab or a re-write; just send a message.

Ja Ne.

Wow! I love this story! It got me hooked so much that I finished it in one sitting!

There is a few thing that make this story bland. But my problem is the amount you use "I" in it. while it is in first person you should use other ways to keep writing. The use of the same start will bring nothing but irritation.

it was all good till this chapter, are you for real? that's so fucking stupid... you say you want to do this a realistic story, making karin get in Sasuke pants, and now Naruto takes it like a walk in the park? that's so unbelievable and far fetch... ridiculous

OMG I love Ryuu and Aki

Trap meets reverse trap

Bro he knocked her up! That could never be me if I was Naruto I’d kill him like after everything is said and done his ass is mine he will be dead like you leave and you tell me to wait as you do what you need to do to protect me and of course I don’t agree with you but I’m waiting still and you knock some other bitch up no that can never be me

This story had me sold with the line,"The temperature outside fluctuated more than Oprah's weight in 1991." Shit had me dying LOL

Interesting story, I think it could use polish... maybe slow the pacing down a bit in some places so it doesn't feel so rushed... but... all in all I'll give it a 6/10.

"My physical body passed away but it turns out being the son of a goddess made my spiritual self almost immortal. My soul and my brothers roam the earth and moon. We watch over you and although we cannot intervene we have been able to keep the nature chakra balanced. At rare times we have been able to intervene and give out gifts."

Wow, that's a huge divergence from canon.

In canon, he reached forwards through time; projecting his mind to a point in time where he could end Kaguya once and for all.

And Kaguya wasn't a goddess, she was just an alien. Whether from another planet or another dimension is unclear, but she's simply a mortal from another planet.

Hamura did something similar with his own evolved form of the Byakugan; so I'm unsure if both used the same method or if both Tenseigan and Rinne-Sharingan are capable of projecting the user's mind forwards like that. It's possible that Hagoromo had the Tenseigan as well, or that the technique is not related to either the Tenseigan or Rinne-Sharingan; instead being entirely based on chakra supply and skill.

Each division is led by a main commander, going to one of five battlefields. From there, the commanders distribute information sent to them to squad leaders; the information coming from central command where some of the Yamanaka are using mental projection techniques to Yamanaka out in the five divisions.

The Primary strategists are Nara, known for being strategists; and Akimichi, known for being wise. They are initially joined by the five Hokage as well, but the five are deployed to fight Madara. Later, the central command is destroyed via a long-range artillery strike from the ten tails. A horrifyingly powerful bijuudama comparable in detonation size to a small nuclear bomb.

The squads are mostly much larger than the standard four-man teams. Probably twenty or more per squad, though some of the stronger shinobi were placed in smaller squads or even just actual teams. And each squad has vice-captains who take over if their main captain dies. The squad captains also seem to be working under some kind of higher up between the captain and the commander, but I can't confirm if this is true. I see small bits hinting towards the possibility, but there's no concrete evidence of anything larger than captain to commander. It may be that the commander was using exclusively messenger shinobi with no other go-between.

In addition to the combat squads and individual messenger shinobi, each of the five divisions also had access to a few squads of medical shinobi and sealing shinobi. But not many. Sealing shinobi are had to find and, while not as rare as fuinjutsu specialists, medical shinobi aren't exactly a dime a dozen.

The war is a lot more detailed than you seem to think at the time of you writing this chapter. Though, I will admit that I felt they could've used things like catapults with explosive tags tied to the rocks. They also didn't seem to set enough traps. More minefields would've been helpful.