Dude, holy shit! I just love your writing here! The angst and the pain! As well as your description of toph’s and aang’s relationship was just lovely to read. I loved reading the drama between katara and aang, this was a joy to read on this site. This is my first comment on this site but I thought that I just needed to praise you for writing such a wonderful taang fic! Again loved this!

This story is AMAZING! I love it! I’m so invested holy cow!

Great story so far, I'm liking how you've portrayed Toph and Aang's personalities aged up a few years. And I'm really enjoying the direction you're taking the story... temporary heartbreak for Aang aside. I'll be looking forward to seeing how you'll have the two of them go forward from here.

Are you going to continue? I would like you to!

I gotta say I'm loving the story so far and can't wait to read more I love how well you're writing aangs feelings towards the avatar state I feel like alot of people sometimes forget about them

I really enjoy the characterizations of Aang and Toph so far. They seem very on point and it's just a blast to read their more grave realizations and actions are also nicely highlighted and appealing. It makes the world go round.

I have been searching for a Toph-centric fanfic for about an hour now and there don't appear to be all that many people interested in writing from a blind girl's perspective, so thanks for doing that! :D

I did notice some inconsistencies with tenses. You mostly use the past tense, but here and there you suddenly have parts in the present tense. There are also a few odd sentences, though they're much rarer than the tenses getting mixed up. A good example of both would be "Toph's mind is running with so many questions. There are so many things that she wanted to ask Aang right now." I would suggest "There were so many questions running through Toph's mind. She wanted to ask Aang about them right now." You could also add something like "if only she could settle on which one to ask first." or something similar. :)

I'm not sure how much criticism, if at all, you are looking for, so I'll just add that you got a typo, "Aand" instead of "Aang" in the 2nd chapter and leave it at that. I hope it helped you in some way and that you continue writing!

The feels in this are just amazing!
I love it but it breaks my heart-
Great work though and I really would like to see how this turns out!

Alec

Absolutely love the story and agree that the world could use more Taang stories. Looking forward to reading more. I like that you have progressed tophs character. She isn't all snark and rude comments. The added depth to her is refreshing, more writers could learn something from you.

you’ve set it up perfectly for the taangy goodness. can’t wait for more

like it so much! love the banter, love the taangyness :3

omg yes the world needs more taang!

very intense first chapter

The next chapter can't come out fast enough! D:

Lol! But seriously, great chapter! :D Awesome job on Aang's emotions! That kid needs a lesson taught alright; you can't always get what you want! XP

Good job on this! I can't wait to read the next one! :)

Shit this was painful. And I hate the pairing of Aang and Karata. Damn. Amazing job. Really loved it.

Brilliant so far! Keep on updating!

Is beautiful! I love him, everything to everything. You narrate well and the interactions between Toph and Aang are really good. I love Aang in his avatar state! it looks so dominantbut I kill myself (not really) when Toph got in the way to save him 3 I loved him but I was afraid that Toph would die \ 3 anyway, I hope an update because it's like you say The world Need more Taang!

I love this story