Nigga what the fuck is this bullshit why you got Sun havin’ dildos up his ass like he’s some gay faggot like holy shit dawg this ain’t right.

Dunno if this will go anywhere, but tickling was mentioned near the beginning, could that be thrown in somewhere?

I was wondering if When you get to Lillie how about she getting sun a sock fetish because regular foot fetish is good all but it would be great if you explore the foot\legwear side of the fetish to mix thing up because regular foot fetish will get boring after a while it be great way to keep things fresh when he meet her she gets him a sockjob or have him lick her socked feet im just asking because that so many foot fetish story's where at best main character at best only smells the socked feet that discard them at worst just discard the socks or stockings or pantyhose I just want read a foot fetish story where the main character actually worship/licking sock\stocking\pantyhose feet and bonus points if the women still wearing the socks/stocking/pantyhose during sex it just I find socks and stocking and pantyhose more sexy that just barefeet if not Lillie how about kahili she would be perfect for introducing sun to the fetish this just me thoughs hope you see this and consider the idea

This story... Is crazily glorious. Pleeeease continue in it XD

Are you saving Lillie for last?

This is incest

You don't upload often, but when you do, I love what I get. Worth the wait.
Very nice job again. You get a thumbs up from me. :)

Ignore Elmo.

The line break is better used for scene breaks and it's best to bold your author notes.

Pokemon names are actual names. Game Freak has stated that for years.

You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or champion. Before you message me about this, please look at fanfiction (d o t) net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread to make sure your argument hasn’t already been addressed.

Script format is banned on this site, and for good reason. You’re an author, not a screenwriter.