Lol keep this going it’s great

can't wait for the next chapter in this story

good job, update soon please!

3.5/5

Great story so far so please update again soon

"I would pick that fight if I were you," You are advising her to commit suicide, not to stay calm. Kinda like the common "I could care less" mistake; saying the opposite of what you mean. Middle of chapter 8 if you don't know which part I'm on about and want context. 'Even worse', not even worst. Through, not thru.

Just tell me if you want me to stop. Most appreciate it when their mistakes are addressed, but not everyone, which is okay too. Looking forward to the next chapter either way, and not just for the sake of nitpicking

I think you confused "none of the last" with nonetheless, unless you're trying to invent a new saying which doesn't make any sense. Fill means to fill something. Like to fill a bottle with water. It's 'a few', not 'a fill'. More commas are needed as well, they should almost always be placed before 'but'. Google "comma before but" for a good explanation.

Sorry if that sounded harsh, but seeing the same mistakes over and over without anybody informing you is a little frustrating. Good story otherwise, I wouldn't have gotten this far if I didn't enjoy it.

Nice turn

Nice done :)

Good, plz more soon

Oh wow and cool Lissa is my name too :)

Great story

Edward dead man walking

:(

Good, plz more soon

Bella deserve happines, Kate her ass kicked and eddie need to die painfully :)