I love it

I'm liking it. sure, its a little cheesy but its not making me cringe my face inward. I think you should keep going!

Hehehehehehehehe dear Dominator having a thing for Wander would shock the Galaxy more than when they learned she was actually a woman. To be fair even though he can be super stupid, we all know Wander's the good guy ALL the bad girls would want.

i agree with calliecature and anonymous advice, you've written the characters in character. It's done well. good job. It's best to edit your paragraphs in bitesized ways or else it'll feel like it's dragging. you're funny and that helps in your aim for people to read, don't be like our dreaded textbooks. remember, you want people to read, not skim.
in terms of emotion, I agree that it should be taken slow. it took me weeks if not months to realize I liked someone. emotions are hard, man.
But overall, I think this is the BEST woy fic I've read so far

Personally, I rather like the longer, more detailed chapter. And if I’m being honest, it wasn’t as long as most chapters I’ve read, so it might seem like it was long to you, but it was pretty medium-sized to me. As for advice writing emotional stuff, I think you got off to a pretty good start. I like that Dominator and Wander got some time to know each other and he saw good in her and got through to her with compassion. But still, she’s still isolated herself from friendships for a long time, so take it slow and let the emotional stuff develop slowly between them. Let them spend more time getting to see sides they like about each other, preferably alone together. Let Wander (eventually or soon, up to you) see more of Dominator’s vulnerability and sides of her that he likes, so that he can respond with more liking, and get through to Dominator more. And let’s see Dominator struggle with and deny her new feelings, but keep coming back to them because she can’t help liking them. I really like this story so far, so I just wanna give you some suggestions for where to take it. Good luck with your schedule and stuff. I hope you get more time soon!

I like it
I love how you kept the characters identical to the series, especially Wander

good job so far

Please continue!

Love it! Hope to see more soon!

The introduction of the 2nd chapter IS funny. Although you might want to chop it up, more than 3 lines in a paragraph is kinda tiring to the eyes and people tend to skip or skim after the 3rd line.

Wander is so in-character in here and a delight. I was kind of grinning when he told his loooong story of how he became the most wanted and Dom got so bored, she dozed off.

You've also got his way of talking. I've also liked how he always assume the best of her even though it's obvious she wants to kill him. Dom is still in-character in here on how she perceives is foolish enthusiasm.

But I'm also glad that you've taken consideration that Wander isn't a goody-goody for nothing. Hater's right. That guy can be crafty.

It's a tough thing to tackle how will someone like Dom fall in love. I don't think she's going to blush immediately. Maybe thrown off at first. Then the resistance which you have mentioned when her smile quicly vanished and was replaced with a scowl.

I think Wander in here could see right through her when he said that she wouldn't be so bored and lonely and wouldn't she like the company. Or maybe he just got there without realizing it.

I love how genuine Wander was in here. He's so well-meaning. Even though Dom is putting up walls. Now, you've taken us inside her mind when she's getting angry and uncomfortable.

A bit of show, don't tell. The line where her aloof and sarcastic exterior shattered was good. But instead of saying She felt her heart open to his words, why not describe how her body is reacting to it? The readers would then feel it in themselves. She doesn't understand why she waited, almost with bated breath for what he has to say. Hating how she felt exposed despite being the bad guy or something along that line.

When we see dom, we expect this smart, violent villain for fun and conquest. But now we see her entertaining Wander's communications. Why? Is it because this is the first in a long time that she has a conversation? Maybe this is the reason why doesn't have her guard up when she asked who would want to be with her.

I wish you were able to describe her confusion disguised as rage when she started blasting anywhere and everywhere Wander might be. Like savagely blasting. Not caring for damages. Blocking her thoughts with each blast. Then through all that noise, Wander spoke. I can imagine his words are like warm wax that pools in your center.

Aaaaw, he hugged her :)

Oh no, we found her weakness. Kindness. I really love the scene where she has her hands on her stomach then she nticed the strange feeling in her body and how her hands shifted towards her heart.

I'm sensing there's going to be a lot of denial along the way. :)

A good start with Dominator getting curiuos WHY Wander is the most wanted. It is in-character and you have used canon info well in here.

We could definitely see Dominator in the first chapter. The way she talks, the demanding tone to her bots and when she dances in celebration. Although it's kinda tough really describing Dom since when she talks, she's also dramatically doing things to describe it. But that's animation for you.

You've also settled the atmosphere well with where Wander and Sylvia is. One could've taken the opportunity to present irony how Dom's scene contrast so much to theirs.

Reading the first chapter is like watching an episode of woy. I miss that cartoon. Keep it up :)

Can't wait for chapter two! I love one sided Death Star!

Cool job buddy please write more of this