Wow. Talk about your tough endings. I was honestly expecting one or the other of them to come to their stupid senses any moment, but in a way this feels much deeper without that.

The one thing I don't get is why Cynder would treat Spyro (or why he would think she was treating him) like a child, and why he would doubt he was good enough for her. That doesn't seem to fit them at all. Also, I'm a little confused as to what Cynder meant when she wondered 'why wouldn't he take her.' It feels either like a typo or very out of place.

I am glad in any case that there's more on the way. Looking forward to it.

I must say that I'm very excited for the next chapter. I've honestly been waiting a long time for a new chapter in your story.

Now, for this chapter: Everything that I've read was truly perfect. Every character and details in it was spot-on. You've certainly outdone yourself this time, Doxie. I've been following this story for a year now, but this chapter definitely improves the quality of your writing over the previous chapters.

My remarks: The interaction between the characters was very well done. I felt the library scene to be almost real. The conversation in the scene with Poetry and Cynder was quite touching, I loved that one in the whole chapter more than the SpyCy scene at the end. Once more, good job with dealing with character development over action. The development of characters is more important in a story than just the action and plot.

I'd say that I'll learn more from you by reading this piece of fiction than any other stories I've once read in the past. This work of fan fiction truly pulls me in to read the entire thing.

Good luck with editing the next couple of chapters, Doxie. Happy writing, too.

-Daniel.

This was an excellent setup chapter for what's coming next. It doesn't tell me exactly what that will be, but it's certainly great for knowing where everything stands in the story so far and the shape of things to come.

The library was delightfully spooky, I could picture it extremely well and I loved the dusty sinister ancient atmosphere of it.
The scene with Imperia was simply gorgeous, you wrote her extremely well. She had an ethereal otherworldly feeling which I've never written her as having before, but all of the dialogue and actions were on point. I hope she'll show up in the story again!
I liked Frog and the mole quite a lot, although I think more mention could have been made of Frog's size being close to Spyro's from the games, at least I assume that's the size he was meant to be?
The scene with Cynder and Poetry was good, their 'friendship' (if that's what it is) feels real and interesting, but also kind of dangerous. I look forwards to seeing what happens in it. It feels like no major characters in your story have positive relationships with each other, or at least not entirely positive. That's not a bad thing, trust and lies are a major theme of the story, but seeing some contrast would be interesting; and I would love to see how you write a primarily positive relationship between two important characters rather than mixed or negative ones. Perhaps Cynder and Poetry will develop into something like that.
The same goes for SpyCy, it was dark and complicated and more than a little bit sad, and I really want them to fix it up in the world.

The writing was excellent, the story development was subtle and promising. Not a lot of plot happened, but it was a vital setup chapter to what comes next, while being interesting enough to deserve to exist in it's own right.
The descriptions were great, especially of the library and Imperia's world.

Overall a fantastic chapter, and I very much look forwards to reading more!

-4Dragons

Is there going to be another chapter? A year has passed since this one. I’m just worried if something’s caught up with you. Like, if you cancelled this story or not.

Either way, I’m thoroughly enjoying the story. So much character development and plotting over action is getting me hooked right off the bat. I’ll learn a thing or two from you by reading more of the story if you’ll post chapter ten soon.

Liking the dialogue at the end. A lot of writers would have gone the obvious route of putting in a love triangle, but you dodge that here pretty smoothly.

I can kind of see why Spyro took off, but I can't say I agree with his choice. Who better to help him sort that out than Cynder?

Quite the packed chapter. The near-deaths were very dramatic, and the fight scene... wow. Just wow, really.

I'm really wondering about these undead dragons. One at least is clearly her old self. The rest seem like crazed zombies, but that last scene... hmm Quite the puzzle.

Lot of emotion in this chapter. Very nicely written.

I'm a bit confused on some particulars, like how a dragon's scales and horns would mark him as a philanthropist, but the story moves along nicely.

This chapter was really nice. Taking a time to relax and get warm after such unexpected incident.
I really like Poetry, her calm, determined and light personality and her way to take the things even in harsh situations.
I liked this calm vibe, recovering from such fight.
Spyro conflicted that he killed someone surely tormented him a lot, and more with those voices in her head... or is another voice...
And Cynder finally awake, and wondering about Poetry, it seems like Cynder still wants Spyro in her life, but long time happened and she seems quite frightened about Spyro if already had someone, and even wondering why Spyro doesn't told her about Poetry.
Gladly Poetry reassured her to not worry, it seems like Spyro still make good friends, but don't forget Cynder in every moment.
Great chapter! I really love how is it doing! :)

Excellent chapter as always!
I enjoyed getting a brief respite, a time for the characters to lick their wounds and come to understand more of the plot.
I'm extremely interested in this poison dragon, I assume she will be one of the returning undead or perhaps even the cause of the whole disaster, and I look forwards to learning more about her and what went on in the past.

I really liked seeing more of Poetry; it was something I mentioned before and I think that it worked out really well having her and Cynder get time to talk together. I do think that Poetry was maybe a little bit too snarky at times in this chapter; but she has just been through a lot and she is quite a badass, so it fits fairly well.

I 100% feel you when it comes to wanting to correct all the mistakes in past chapters, but it's been a pleasure to read through this story and I think your chapters are relatively mistake free.
I'd love to see you publish short stories or oneshots or whatever you have; I hope you decide to do so!

Thanks for posting a great new chapter!

-4Dragons

I love the villain for this chapter; in fact I really enjoy the way that the entire story is set up like a series of boss battles, with the stakes getting higher and higher each time. I think it's a fantastic way to write a story, and it means it's able to keep a really good interest curve.

This 'boss' has definitely been the spookiest so far, and I thought it was very fitting. This entire chapter seemed to have something of a death theme, even more so than usual for a story that crosses Spyro with the Dark Souls world; and I thought it was great.
My very favorite scene was what happened to Cynder; I think that you wrote it incredibly well, and it was certainly the highlight of the chapter in my opinion. (Although hearing my character getting mentioned in a fanfic as cool as this one was also an amazing moment!)

I have two minor flaws with this chapter; neither of them is something really wrong, but they are still flaws. The first is that I would have really liked to see more of Poetry; she seems really cool and I'd have liked for her to be brought into the story a bit earlier and perhaps getting some interaction with Cynder. As it is she came a bit out of nowhere (I think she was mentioned in one of the earlier chapters very briefly?). Hopefully we can see more of her later in the story?
The other flaw is that some parts of the chapter feel a bit rushed; part of it was just that they were outshone by the best moments in the chapter, but it did feel like you did a bit of jumping between high point to high point while glossing over the context in between; possibly because you were on a high of inspiration and writing things as soon as they came into your mind, which is a good way to be but does require that you go back and edit more carefully later. I think that just a few extra sentences dotted through the chapter would have fixed this, always be willing to add sentences to your chapter during proof-reading if you don't already do that.

Overall; another fantastic chapter as usual! Amazing imagery, very thought provoking, and a great climax for this act of the story!
I'm looking forwards to the next chapters more and more now; you're a great writer and I can't wait to see what you have in store.

-4Dragons

I llike the fight and battle against the evil

Hi!
It's been a while since I read your story.
Well, I really get interested with the Blood Souls' story and narration, and also story plot to make it really cool and shocking! (And the Souls' OST fits really well)
Something I get troubled was the fact that Spyro and Cynder were separated by many years, but seeing them together again, and passong time again softened my heart.
I liked how your narration goes through many things and explains things marvelously, also adding and presenting and developing many characters, mostly new.
I get very interested in Spyro's and Cynder's feeling to each other, first off Spyro scared to lost her again, and Cynder feeling guilt for leave him, jealous of how he spent time with Eliesia, and pain by how war restarted.
I hope there is a moment soon where they unless can set their feeling for each other, to stop fearing.
The nature of the story is really dark and fulled of action (But I can handle it)
Great job, my friend! I loved how it's going so far :)

Liked this chapter. It's always nice to see not much action in one story. Maybe I should do this like how you did. You know, with not much action focused, but more character focused in the plot. Maybe I could learn a thing or two from you with plotting.

Great chapter! Similar in theme to the last one, a nice break chapter from the hopelessness, but with a feeling of growing time pressure. I'd like to know what the main villain (presumably Malefor) is doing around this time, but it might suit the story better for them to have to go to him, after all that's how it works in Souls games.
Speaking of souls games your writing feels more and more perfectly in tune with them with every chapter I read; it's fantastic.

I liked Cynder reflecting on how her relationship to Spyro is at the moment, the hint of jealousy is very in character for her; but while I think you'd be able to write it very well I'm personally hoping there will be no love triangle.
I couldn't entirely get into the very end part of the chapter where the group is having a meeting; the emotions felt kind of hollow (no pun intended) to me. The situation doesn't seem good enough for them to be smiling, maybe grim smiles or a mixture of that and relief. Still that's just a minor concern of mine.

Your writing is also getting easier to read, I enjoy the elaborate way you describe things more and more; but there are some times when it's still not totally clear who is talking, which sometimes does make it a bit harder to follow.

Overall an excellent chapter; I'm very curious to see what comes next!
-4Dragons

dam, more questions then answers with this chapter. then again questions only give the eagerness for a new chapter a boost, and of course curiosity begs to be answered, specially slurp and cynders relationship and we're will it go