Girl, this screams Fetish Porn. But it’s ok cause I love it anyway. XD

“This is my mobile home.” Lol I see what you did there.

My only criticism would be to refrain from using the word “seem” because that’s a form of telling and not showing.

Great story! Also I loved the part where it said Luigi didn't fit in the doorway and he ended up destroying it or something, resulting in Mario cursing. XD

Also one error I noticed: when Daisy asks Luigi about the date and Luigi replies, he says, "I'd love to go on a date of you" or something like that. It should be "with", not "of".

But still, good story. I liked it!

I really loved this and I liked the interactions and this was perfect for a one-shot. The effects of the Snack Basket had me chuckling and the fact that they were going to send Bowser a basket full of inflating sweets, I was in stitches at this part.

This was a great little one shot and thanks for putting a smile on my face.

hahaha yessss this was great XD
Favorite line: "so why is the couch destroyed?"
"Luigi said he was hungry enough to eat a couch...so he tried to"

That's awesome! This was very creative, and the treats sounded yummy at first. :-)

I loved every bit of that! Also this bit:

"And what's this?"
"My...mobile home?"

This gag might never work at fooling someone, but it never fails to make me laugh like mad. Thanks so much for including that.

Snack Basket and LuigiXDaisy? To be fair, I'm not a huge fan of the shipping, but Snack Basket catches my interest. But I'm a bit worried that this will have Toads being Peach's children and-

"Toad children taking a break from school"

... excuse me?

"Toad children" "School" "Axem Rangers" "Tace T." "Treadmill" "The actual Snack Basket move!"

Wow! So many references! And they aren't just "haha, Mario Kart reference", but actual subtle RPG references that fit within the story. I love that. There's even a reference to my favorite Spongebob episode in there!

Speaking of Suds, let's talk about one of the best parts of the fanfic: it excites the imagination. What if this was like Suds, where Luigi had to go to the doctor because of Snack Basket, but Daisy tried to hide him? What if Luigi ate Blorb Mushrooms instead (I'm surprised there wasn't a Blorbs reference, but maybe the outbreak didn't happen yet)? What if Luigi ate them in Toad Town and the Toads panicked, and it humorously goes downhill from there? I love it the way it is, but I also love it for its possibilities.

Overall, here's my thoughts: anyone who hates LuigiXDaisy or characters getting fat/inflated, press the back button immediately. For anyone else, read this fanfiction. You might get a cute Suds-like story, or you might get some inspiration for your next fanfic. I recommend it to anyone, but I highly recommend it to people who love the things I mentioned. This is going in my favorites, definitely.

Madz the Penguin

I'm so happy you're writing again! Also, I can't believe you wrote all of this on a phone and still managed to write it grammatically correct and without spelling errors!
About the story: I loved this! It was very funny without being stupid. The plot was lighthearted and sweet, and combined with the fact that it;s about my favourite Mario ship, it was just what I needed after a long week at school. Good job!

I just laughed myself sick when Daisy picked up inflated Luigi like it was nothing... and Mario's reaction was freakin' hilarious. XD

Ha, finally! Indeed it has been a long while, isn't it? I am glad that you are back in your writng mood again!

I have to mention tho, I really love how you portraited the interactions between Mario and Luigi in this story. They look really close, and loves to joke around (especially for Mario's case). I think I don't usually seen this kind of teasing in Mario Fanfiction Archive, but man the 'slice of life' sibling interactions did bring a grin in my face.

I really like how Luigi reacted to Mario's teasing and... sneaking, and I had to say this tho: Mario, you kinda deserve it. And not to mention what did the Snack Basket's deserts to Luigi... yeah Mario, you should had warned Luigi earlier ya know...

Haha! Luigi has a huge tooth apparently! Then again, anyone who likes to eat will definately drool over delicious deserts [Even I did!] Looks like Luigi's love for desert had turned on him!

D-Daisy... how the HECK did you lift Luigi's 'inflated' form?! Lady, what did you eat for your diet to have that super strength?! Even Mario has some difficulties lifting Luigi in this form... [Heck, she slapped Bowser very hard until he freaking FLEW in Mario Party 3...] Seriously, what DID you eat?!

Ah... your explaination for Snack Basket kinda make sense. I was thinking how did Luigi get fat and then become thin so FAST after the attack had been executed... Or you know, screw logic. Also, I swear I keep getting reminded of how did Boswer get fit in M&L:BiS with that treadmill section.

Hello to multiple Mario references and 4th wall breaking... I did found this story is very funny for the most part when I first read it. (Seriously, even the newly added 'Mama Luigi' actually makes me wanna laugh out loud) Aside from the obvious eh... 'inflating' part, which I had said before as very 'weird', this story makes me smile the entire time when I did the editing.
[Also, remind me that Daisy needs more cameos/roles in other spin off games (excluding Kart, Party and Sport games), she is actually underdevelop... 'cause in the old days, she is a clone of Peach until she got her tomboy-ish attitude...']

Anyway, pretty nice and long one-shot. There are quite a number of cute moments in this story, and I did have a very fun time reading this story. Again, welcome back to the writing community! And thanks for the shout out, my dearest author; I am happy to help out. Who knew editing can be fun? (I enjoyed it TBH)

I seriously NEVER noticed this story is quite long, but that is pretty much how much I read on other series' single chapter length (as in multi-chapter story). I am used to crazy long chapters after all.