Great job please continue the story I really liked it a lot

in this chapter, you said Naruto was the middle of the 3, when he's actually the oldest

Finally the Chunin Exams has begun!

I wonder how it will turn out!

oh man

A good enough first chapter, though I would have had it continue longer simply to get all of the set-up done and over with. A few spelling errors, but nothing too bad. Only real flaw I could find is one that is popping up in most fanfics nowadays: you don't keep your tenses consistent.

When you write, the entire work needs to be written in the same tense, otherwise you wreck the flow of the story and risk confusing your readers. This story appears to be in the past-tense, so you shouldn't be using verbs like 'goes' or 'sees' or any of the such. You are telling a story that has already happened, hence the name 'PAST-tense'. This would apply the exact same way if you were writing in present or future-tense. Dialogue is the only place where any verb can have a tense that does not match the rest of your story.

Oh my god, Naruto's eyes are a real piece of a hybrid dōjutsu monstrosity. I can see qualities of Byakugan, Rinnegan, implied Sharingan and when activated, even Tenseigan.

I am really enjoying this story, keep up the great work!

I’m really enjoying this fic. Just one thing that is bothering me, and I didn’t see an explanation so not sure if you did or not. While on the island in chapter 12, Naruto tried to use his Byakugan and it caused him pain. A little later and Naruto and Hinata are sparing with their Byakugan active. Was this a foreshadow or a mistake?

Other than that I look forward to seeing where this story ends up going. Please update quickly!

You know, I was starting to get interested in your fanfic... But then you decided to use that god-awful filler as a backstory. Shame, really.

OK aside from a few maybe 2 type errors the story gets better the longer it goes so i want more of it.

Just finished reading this chapter and what i written about the 3 chapter was nearly everything explain. I will first finish reading all chapter and then write about it a comment in the last chapter

Is the whole Hyuuga ritual a bit like Hashiramas cells? when yes does it has the same risks ?

I don't like that you made the Hirashin depend on a bloodline and hope that you meant the Senju bloodline aka the sages yang Chakra. And that the Hirashin still needs a mastership in fuinjutsu, the blood ritual is ok i guess you could have gone more in detail how it works or made it more mystery because i find it hang in between the two now feels a little awkward. But overall im still happy with the story.

I believe that Kushina had a four symbol's seal not an eight trigrams seal and you written larch instead of large but that all errors i could find. Overall a good first chapter and i hope for many more if they hold this quality.

Okay, so just ignore this if you like my story.

I don't really care for the opinions of people who are prejudice against the story before even reading it... The only people whose opinion matter are the many readers who actually like my story. If you don't like it, don't read it. Of course I want more readers and reviews, but I'm not going to completely change my plot just because one person decides to call me a sh*t writer for not doing what they like.

So yeah, again just ignore this if you like the story.