This story is amazing! I love how you get different perspectives of all the different characters throughout the time lines . and the more realistic view on the world. Please keep updating I haven't found a this good story in ages!

Chapter 7 and Chapter 8 are the exact same. Did you meant to post the same chapter twice? Or was one just ment to be a different chapter?

This story is wonderfully written and quite original. I've been really enjoying it so far, but there is one small problem I have noticed. You transition straight from chapter five to chapter seven, which threw your chapter numbers off. Beyond that, the slow pacing and interesting twist on the setting really captured my interest. It is something that you have done painfully well. I also feel as if on occasion there are periods where there should be commas instead, but that could simply be my obsessive comma placing disorder.

wow. dark fic. wish thered been some fore warning.
I'm out

I'd really like to love this story but I can't. You are writing some sort of angsty psychological thriller and it's honestly not AT ALL my kind of book so I'll try to stay "technical".

Your writing style is too jarring for me, I cannot appreciate it. It even bogs down understanding sometimes. I find it foggy: I have the feeling I'm reading strings of words rather than sentences with actual meaning. Some scene straight up lost me. Like the last scene of this very chapter with Itachi. Like. Okay, what's the point?

Your narration is nearly non-existent. I know from your A/N in the second chapter that it is intended so that "[we] will have to guess as to what actually happened". Except it's a story, not life, and I'm not you: I cannot pick your brain to get what you meant. You manipulate our access to information excessively and for everything. It could have been interesting as far as the "Kakashi case" goes. For the rest, it does not create tension but annoyance.

One example: you write Naruto's life almost like a mystery. You never give us the most basic baseline and only drop hints of his overall situation. Why in the hell would you write it like that? Why write like a mystery something that is not a mystery? I don't care about your Naruto because I don't even know who the hell he is supposed to be.

Now the Kakashi case. We already know Kakashi Hatake is an S-rank shinobi, adopted brother of Naruto, and that he was restrained for some reason. From chapter 2, it'd seem it is because the Sandaime forbad him to see Naruto. And now the opposite problem is, you stopped dropping hint about the why of this decision. Everyone, even Naruto, knows he is the jinchuriki, he is called Uzumaki-sama, he has been adopted... Why can't Kakashi see Naruto? Not the beginning of a hint. Is it entirely to create drama? In this case, the logic of your Universe just collapsed on itself.

Anyway, best writing to you.

Great job please continue the story

Enjoyable story keep up the good work.

wow that was amazing

I'm so happy yet so EAGER FOR THE NEXTCHAPTER

They finally meet! And it was as sweet as I'd hoped.

dun dun dahhah

lol I love this story! great chapter! can't wait for the next one! :)

I have to say that this is one of the best fanfiction I've read on this page (and believe me it is by all means not a small amound). The idea is original, the action is present in all your chapters and you absolutely bought me when the Odyn appeared. I couldn't keep a smile when Naruto finally met his Nii-san. Thank you and please keep working on this masterpiece.

Okay so your take on Kakashi is hella amazing. Like I love it. I didn't really know what the hell was going on till chapter 5 because the continuous switching of views and times.

I can't wait to read more

Kakashi's summons was impressive. You can tell the bond between him and Taiyou is strong, considering the latter's appearance and the ease at which they communicate (both verbally and nonverbally).

Kakashi has his freedom. It's like the calm before the storm . . .

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