This is probably my favorite Interlude you've done. I really like the pairing of Frax and Velvet, allowing them to play off one another to keep Frax's overabundant energy in control, but also letting Velvet lighten up and have some fun with her brother too.

The story itself was great, I thought the flow was excellent. The idea to get the bouquet coming from the twins' class is lovely, and the build up to the excitement on Poni Island is well done. I like the bit of reworking you did with introducing Munchlax's role too. One small note is you left the flowers of Akala meadow being described as scarlet, but when you talk about the Ula'Ula flowers, they are scarlet too.

The run in with the wild Pokemon on Poni was very well done. It certainly felt like a battle of beginner trainers against some much higher level pokemon. I thought you did a very good job of having RotomDex help out in the battle too, almost serving as the user interface we get in the games. I imagine that's how a trainer would use a PokeDex in a battle situation, and it felt believable that Rotom was able to look up things quickly for Frax when he asked. I'm still not a fan of the italicized words for impact in the action sequences. I think they carry much more weight when used in spoken dialogue, like one of Velvet's lines. The scenes are plenty exciting even without the added emphasis.

I like the ending with Munchlax picking up the antique vase, I didn't suspect a thing when it was doing the "garbage" collecting on Poni. The humor with the twins' plan backfiring nearly twice was well done, and again the way you write Frax and Velvet shines in this section. The added gift of helping out their mom was really cute too. Even though this wasn't out for Mother's Day, it still shares the sentiment, and I think you did a very good job with it :)

I really liked this. It was nice and sweet and fit in to the whole slice of life feel that I’ve been getting from Pokémon Sun and Moon. You might not have gotten this out in time for this year’s mother’s day, but I’m definitely going to reading on next year’s Mother’s day. Also it was a very fitting way to introduce Munchlax into the Team. Other than that I was very pleased with the humor that was present throughout this story.

I liked this one. Keep up the good work. And don't worry, I'll be sure to check out Vinylshadow.

Took me longer to review as I figured I would read this as I translated it into Spanish. It's a pity you didn't get to have it in time for Mother's Day, because I really enjoyed the twins' scenes with their mom, it's clear they're a really loving family. And of course, it was quite the adventure, they should know better not to get into that place until they're strong enough to face those Pokémon. Haven't played S&M to know what's the "black something", but I'm assuming it's an Ultra Beast?

In any case, overall it was a nice oneshot. Maybe I should start making something in Alola too, but that'll come later, I'm working on other stuff. Keep up the good work ;)

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[this story takes place in a broad strokes version of the Sun & Moon Anime timeline with a few game elements]

I would argue that if this is predominately revolving around the anime characters, it belongs in the anime world. Find your story under "Manage Stories" and select it from the dropdown menu that says "World: Any" in the "Category" section.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor. Or school. Before you message me about this, please look at fanfiction (d o t) net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread to make sure your argument hasn't already been addressed.

Good to know Hau has his priorities straight and is willing to go head to head with a pokémon to fulfill them.

A delightful read as always.

Let me just say that this read like it was straight out of the adventures on the show. Even though I'm not into the Pokemon Reset Bloodlines scene, I was able to get into this very easily. I felt like it was just another episode of the anime. Frax and Velvet were perhaps and unnecessary complication to the usual formula replacing Ash, but I found the two of them refreshing nonetheless. Having a brother and sister duo to complement each other is much more entertaining than Ash by himself.

It was also sweet that this all started because Frax and Velvet just wanted to give a good present to their mom, which is an adorable plot point, and ended with a new addition to the team.

A couple persistent issues in the story existed, however. 80% of this story seems to be dialogue, and a fic that relies overly much on people talking starts to drag on, especially over eight thousand words. I feel like this story would have been much more exciting if it had been half the length because of this. 8k words is fine and all, but when it's just talking head bantering back and forth the entire time with the occasional change of scenery, it gets a little straining to get through.

There are other issues too, such as how the kids managed to initially convince Kiawe to help them, and how much of the drama felt tacked on or added. For example, the initial flight down onto Akala Meadow felt like an odd addition of drama that was resolved quickly, with Kiawe having to land a distance away from the meadow. A couple phrases could have been reworked, like them landed "by pure luck".

Because of this story basically being a series of tiny events back to back, strung together, I feel that if it instead was a much smaller number of events with much more fleshing out, it would have flowed together better. Like maybe focus entirely on the struggles of Poni Island instead of beating around the bush before that.

Regardless of my complaining, this was a fun story to read and it didn't feel necessary to have watched all of the enemy or read any other reset bloodlines stories to get into it. Keep up the good work!