Beautiful first 3 chapters. Keep going. I would like to read more.

You have done a very good start for your story. Hope you make Ash The Kanto Pokemon League Champion. Before this arc is done .I would like to see how he takes on The other regions as a Champion.

This is a nice story. But there is one thing I have to ask. Who is going to be Ash's love interest ? If I had to pick I would say Cynthia or Diantha. Hey it is not up to me.

Nice chapter, short but I thinks it's better than long, sometimes.

Will wait for the next.

These chapters are too short.

Good chapter. Keep writing man. You got a few errors that need to improve. All in all, good work.

Nice chapter, today I was away so I juNice chapter, today I was away so I just noticed and I like noticed and I like it.

Nice beginning of the story. Hope you continue to do well.

if you need any oc's you can use any of mine if you want

MegaHeracross214, I won't use her in this story sadly, but she will probably make it to the Sinnoh Arc

St Elmo's Fire, thank you for the little pointers in my story. I will definitely try to fix the mistakes for this story as soon as possible. I guess I am a beginner at this kind of thing so I will need a lot of constructive criticism so thank you a lot.

I've got an OC gym leader for your fanfiction. Her name is Quartz and she's a Ground type specialist but you probably won't want her because she's from Sinnoh and uses Sinnoh native Pokémon: Torterra, Steelix, Gastrodon, Garchomp, Rhyperior, Mamoswine, Golem, Camerupt, Sandslash, and some non Ground types: Rapidash; Bronzong; and Crobat.

This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under "Manage Stories" and select it from the dropdown menu that says "World: Any" in the "Category" section.

[kanto]

Is a name, should be capitalized.

[Strong, Smart, and Aura Ash.]

Then he's not Ash. If you hate Ash so much, it's okay to just write about an OC. Insisting your OC is totally Ash is just really confusing, and inconsiderate to the people who are looking for stories that are actually about Ash.

You're formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as ["Hello," she said] or ["Hello!" she said], never ["Hello." She said] or ["Hello", she said] or ["Hello" she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it's written as ["Hello." She grinned], never ["Hello," she grinned]. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like "laughed" or "giggled" is in the second category. (“Speak” is also not a speech verb.) Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's ["Hi," she said. "This is it."] not ["Hi," she said, "this is it."] or ["Hi," she said "this is it."] And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's ["Hi. This," she said, "is it."] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don't use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.

[Also, I will accept OC's.]

Here's a bunch: fanfiction (d o t) net/topic/11834/128021680/1/Character-Bio-Thread

Check my profile for my OC

I want to try...and Nice chapter.

Here's my OC, can be friend?

Name: Angela Blossom.

Age: 10

Hair: Waist-long brown hair.

Eyes: Blue.

Clothes: Wears a dark blue T-shirt, black jacket, blue pants, white socks and brown shoes. Brings a travelling blue bag.

Personality: Friendly and gentle, she likes to help anyone, but understands when she might be on the way.

Pokrmon: Mystic the Popplio (her Starter, female)

Luna Alola Vulpix, got from her parents, female

Other Pokemon she'll catch:

Wind the Pidgey, male

Sylvia the Shiny Eevee, female

Blossom the male Oddish

Red the male Ponyta

Will evolve all to the final moves, Blossom will become Bellossom and Sylvia Sylveon.

Will be: Trainer

History: She comes from the Alola Region, but she's not interested in waiting another year for the Island Challenges, she went to Kanto after getting her two Pokemon.

I'm sure I'm forhetting somethong let me know.