can we only focus on the Confederation on this fanfic

You probably don't care given that we are coming up on a year since this was updated; however, I feel the need to express my disappointment with this version. It actually seems less realistic than the original. How casual the people are coming out of cryo-sleep is very odd considering their situation. Even so, you kept a lot of things the same-so that was okay.

All and all, I feel this one is of lesser quality than the first.

Great chapter also taking in the horde wounded was awesome. So for anyone who is looking to read this you only need a very basic understanding of Warcraft peoples and almost none about civ beyond earth its fairly well explained in the intro.

Poor sods this people from Horde.

On the other note i really wonder what will be policy beetwen colonies and Alliance Horde. I doubt that they would do actual wars (unite front at the front side) but they wouldn't be above fucking with each other by proxy. And may heaven have mercy on Horde or Alliance trying to bully any colony... this will not end preaty.

Nice update. Hope for more with that night-elf.

Good chapter! I really liked Kozlov's portrayal here, particularly the end of his interactions with Ohanpa. His line about his first battle was neat too.

Ohanpa approaching the colony was really neat too.

One thing you might want to consider a bit is gender ratios, particularly for the Slavic Federation. So far, we've seen one woman and otherwise only men, although it's possible that I've missed someone. Sure, the sample is not representative, as you've mostly been writing about the military, but the people planning this expedition must have had some thoughts about the substitutability of the colony and one that skews heavily male might be a bit awkward when it comes to having a new generation. If you want to avoid that impression, I'd suggest that you make a few more of the bit characters women.

The flow of the battle is good and you utilise the changing perspectives well. Good ending!

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-Please don't make the the ARC the bad guys.-

Remember that everybody is a bad guy to somebody. The ARC are going to be bad-guys at certain points, but so is everybody else. Even the Slavic Federation will do some questionable things from time to time, but so do modern governments.

It is the ARC's policy which will earn it a bad reputation, but that doesn't necessarily make it the bad guy. Their PMC's (Essentially privatized military mercenaries) in particular won't be looked upon nicely by other colony's.

Not to mention that everyone is going to have their shade of grey in this story.

So the ARC are going to be bad guys, but they will be good guys too. Every colony is going to have it's share of good and questionable actions. Every body is going to be a bit of both, hence being a shade of grey. Not fifty shades of grey though... that's another story :P

In conclusion, If you get on a colony's bad side, they are going to find a way to fuck you up, end of story. They aren't going to care so much about the morals surrounding the whole thing as they are about the safety of their citizens.

Please don't make the the ARC the bad guys.

Great chapter! The pacing works well and the events are really interesting.

I really liked Kaja. Her scientific interest in the world was nice to read. Her frustration at the soldiers came over very well and made me sympathise with her. I liked her reaction to first seeing the aliens. Her subsequent panic was well written too.

When there isn't a change of subject, I'd keep the dialogue lines in the same paragraph as the thoughts/actions of the person speaking. You sometimes do this, but not always.

A few typos:
“What good does all this do anyway?, I doubt that I'll need to know how to use a gun here.” No need for a comma between these sentences.
“mana is magic, essentially.” It's the beginning of a new sentence, so you want to capitalise “Mana”.
“Great, now i am going to have to spend more of my barely existent coins on her.” “I” should be capitalised.

You frequently use an apostrophe when it is really a plural and not a possessive.

I'd have expected rather more surprise at human and near-human aliens showing up. That they speak English should be pretty surprising too.

I found the soldiers' thoughts while preparing to fight the orcs interesting.

I enjoyed Kozlov's reaction to the magic claim, but also found it strange. I find it very plausible that this is exactly how he feels, but I'd also think that being handed control of the expedition would require considerable diplomatic accomplishment and as such that he would find a more tactful way to phrase his disbelief, although canon characterisation is sparse.

Ohanpa was really great too, particularly in the final part. The medical assistance he tried to provide was a great, dark perspective and his ideas for what to do next are really interesting. I liked him a lot.

Let's see how soon Nozdorum start to bang his head in a wall.

Nice work! This is a really intriguing idea. I know next to nothing about WoW, but seeing a Beyond Earth fic is nice.

The opening is my favourite part and the coffee is a really neat detail.

There's a bit of random capitalisation and I feel that there are a few places where it doesn't read smoothly.

Kozlov's speech to the Slavic Federation is lovely, but it's taken from the promotional material. It's a rather long direct quotation and I doubt it's in the public domain, so I don't think it sits well with the site's rules.

There are lots of very interesting ideas in the scanning scene. I find it a bit odd that alien life isn't seriously discussed though. Even with Kozlov dismissing the tree, the atmospheric composition and particularly the availability of a fossil fuel point to the fact that there definitely at was life there at one point.

“The scientist moved his head side to side, the universal bodily symbol for no.” While a common gesture for no, it isn't universal. And this could be erased by time and cultural exchange, but Bulgaria is a country where this isn't necessarily so.

Good reactions from the ground.

Kozlov's dramatic gesture was neat.

I'm interested in seeing how this continues.

Alright. You have me interested. Let's see what you can do buddy. Good luck

Keep it up.

Glad your back. Now we can finally have the fanfiction we didn't know we needed until you made the first one. I'll be looking forward to this remake/remix/redux.

Also, due to recent events, will the great mistake involve a certain orange wearing a toupee, because that will be hilarious.