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thanks for the update!

Preceding well. I think the character development is very good in this story. I look forward to its completion. Thanks for your hard work.
Jay

Go Honoka! Finally, someone I guess who refuses to take the blame. I really though after last chapter is was going in a way where Umi didn't have to pay a price for what she did. Great story, thanks!

Not even an "I'm sorry" from Umi. What a _t! I never say that word, but it applies to her. I never thought about Umi that much, but as I think about the series, she really is a selfish person, never willing to admit fault, talking down on people, especially Honoka, etc. Your story does a good job of pulling everyone's personalities as from the anime. And you have Nico perfect (she's my favorite) too! Not many story writers get as close to each character's personality as you do, and thanks for t bgg at.

It's in the open now, I'm happy! lol. Never minding the a/n's and such, I really liked how you put this story together. There were enough hints to sort of know what's going on (when it was noted that there unsaid things between the "second years" I knew it had to do with a love confession, but not who said what. I am excited to read the balance of this story.
Jay

This is supposed to be the Honoka chapter yet we still don't know what rotten thing Umi did to her. Where is the real Honoka chapter... guess I'll just read on...

Ok I'm back now having read the entire thing whereas before I was skimming. The flow of dialogue as it progresses is absolutely my favorite thing; in addition the way progress is not a straight line but curves and winds and sometimes goes backwards for not just Umi but everyone as they are strained to the brink of fracture and despair is very close to describing mental illness

I'm glad that Umi's depression is never magically cured just because she's around others or even whenever she's having good moments, since there's a harmful misconception in media period that depression can just Go Away or is solely an attitude problem and not a debilitating illness that requires help.

I think this is a fun little story where even though sometimes it may feel Tell Don't Show and a little bare in prose/description (though this is more during the early chapters) it's characters and themes are grounded enough along with well executed hard hitting dialogue that I'm enamored with it before I can fully realize.

There were several moments as well where the weight of what was being discussed and revealed pulled me back into all the people who've tried to help (in sincerity or not) me with my PTSD and MDD. It was really emotional to be reminded too of a similar anxiety and guilt in the times I've fucked up or have been hurt reflected by Umi and everyone. How in spite of this there is a quiet hope beneath the surface.

I like this a lot and I think you should continue to do what you creatively feel is best to capture what inspires you when you write this. I can sense how much effort and enjoyment you put into this and that's the most important thing otherwise it's not fulfilling imo

Also A Nozomi, I love that bih lol

why do I have a feeling Maki will fall for Umi... Shit if Honoka found that, Geez Honoka doesn't deserve that

This is good and a noticeable improvement in terms of prose I think. The dialogue was the star and what I enjoyed the most; it felt grounded and genuine. It was at a nice middle ground between not feeling flat but also not just feeling like an author's direct mouthpiece. I felt a sense of weight in the characterization because of it. Also like the respect you give toward writing about depressive and anxiety related symptoms. When it's handled with care like this it really lets the emotions shine and connects them better to the reader.

When I'm not busy I'll definitely keep reading.

You made me cry.

I've been a loner so I can't say I re-lived or know how it feels to drift apart from old friends BUT I know my blood, soul, skin, well, every fibre of me is with μ's, so I'd like to say I could feel all the pain and hurt Umi was feeling. It's so... how do I put this?

It's a constant throbbing of dread and knowing and not wanting to know.

Honoka like this is not something Umi or anyone ever wants to see. Making matters worst it was Umi who did it. ;m;

By the end of this chapter I can't help but feel like I'm really dead inside...so empty and yet hurting at the same time. This must be because I'm feeling for Umi /and/ Honoka. ...

I was half expecting Yukiho to appear during all that but I guess it wouldn't be quite right, like, Yukiho wouldn't allow Honoka to continue, seeing how hurtful it is for Honoka to be reliving what happened to speak of her feelings. And Umi definitely needed to hear all that.

You say Umi and Honoka deserves a better ending but gods, I don't even know...Umi PLEASE, pull yourself together and stop being a coward? Is what I wish to say but...ughhh, Umi...Umi... "What are we going to do with you?"

Question, who was the one that notified Kotori? :")

So, other than the fact that you got me to tears too, the music part was really, really good. Maki's support is simply the best Umi could ever ask for. And I have to point out the part where you always describe that Umi /allowed/ herself a smile. As thought it's such a taboo thing for Umi to feel any hint of joy because she deems herself guilty for robbing Honoka's. (not that she's wrong yet somehow kind of wrong to keep feeling guilty too O,O Since I feel rather strongly on not having regrets. And if you want something fixed, go and fix it X.X)

ANYWAYS! You have no idea how excited I was to get the email notif for this story's update! And I just can't wait for the next one! Don't hurt me and Honoka (and Umi) like this! Ahhhh.

In all this time I forgot how much I missed a good u's author, and a good u's story. Really, it had been only two sentences and I was already hooked up again in this story like if it wasn't passed all this time.

I think with time you're matured? Not in the writing which is still top notch, like in the matter of the fic itself. I've seen it myself, reading things from when I was younger, you have a different way to see things or you lacked of knowledge.

Anyway, funny how Maki put things in perspective, basically summing up the fic! Didn't expect either Honoka onto the "I can't forgive you", seeing how the chat went.
But this doesn't want to be a review, just a "it's nice to see you back, I missed you!"

This chapter hurt so much. Honoka in that state really got to me, because I've seen how it happened to someone before. Umi's tension, up to her ending in this chapter hurt me, too. I can hardly remember what happened in the past chapters (though I could tell while reading - that's quite exhibiting how well you wrote this one). The songmaking process was so detailed, and well illustrated that I could vividly imagine the scene. In Honoka's room? I'm suddenly reminded of my own old pain and it suddenly hurt as much as it did when it was fresh, as much as my heart ached so much for these two. Thank you for letting us see and experience this fic.

It's great that You are continue this story. I was starting worrying that another good tale will be abandoned. Till We Make Our Ascent is one of the best stories I ever read on the .

Scene in Honoka's room was nice. When this two fall on the bed I just remembered one scene from the manga :)

Kotori and Umi talk was really realistic and mature. I totally see Kotori as the wingman for this two. Also I'm glad that bluenette starting considering her potencial future with Honoka. I wasn't sure about happy ending for this two... it's plus for You. Good autors are able to bring uncertainty for readers.

End of chapter was honey for my heart. I can't wait to see the rest this night.

I don't know quite what to say, but this story has been exciting and emotional and such a good read. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter!

ETA? Interested to see how this ends.