Hey I really love the rewrite of the story ! The writting is way more nice and the characters seem more natural and deep ! I'm looking forward the next chapter

an interesting story as for Garp he rea6is a real bastard in this one

Marco is right about Garp, just an abusive bastard blaming his own grandson for being forced into prostitution and repeatedly raped. Blaming the victim, a classic tactic used by scum.

I like the fact that marco still cares deeply about Ace and wants to protect him, despite the fact that he knows Ace is being forced to plot his death. It's not Ace's fault, but it still shows a great deal of character, unlike Garp.

Zoro and Sanji fighting over the remote. I can see that happening, those two fight like an insane old married couple.

Law's hatred of being touched no doubt has something to do with Don Flamingo, right?

Of course Luffy wants to eat, he always wants meat!

Great Update!

Really like this. Hope that you will continue. Thanks.

Ooohhh, I am so um, proud, glad, happy? Anyway, congratulations on this rewritten version because boy, you've improved well! Small mistakes here and there, but the story is much well written and many parts of the story make sense now. Although I do wonder why Marco would sneak into Shank's place, wouldn't it be considered as something that shouldn't be done to keep their alliance? I mean, Marco's logical as hell and I do hope there's a logical reason behind his actions.

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i really love this story
when will you update?
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please updats

Yes! I seriously love the LawSan friendship, so protective of each other. And lol, Shanks obsessing with Mihawk is great. It's sad that Marco wants to die, I hope he and Ace could help each other. I look forward to the next chapter, since there is ZoSan and hopefully LuLaw too.

I really am curious with Sanji. Where is Zeff? Why is he allowed to move without the suit the Celestial Dragons use? Will the Vinsmokes play a role? Does law know Sanji is a Vinsmoke? Does Sanji know of Law's past about Doflamingo and Corazon? What about Gin, will he come back? I wish they could have been friends. Marco is plannig something and Whitebeard wants for Marco to be in a relationship, lol. I like this concept of yours so please update soon

I liked how protective Law is with Sanji. It was such a cute LawSan moment. And I love Marco, and how he interacts with his brothers. I am really wondering if Sabo is actually captured and Blackbeard is actually only lying. I really hate Blackbeard.

I love this! Such an interesting idea! I really love ZoSan, LuLaw and MarAce so I am happy that you have those three pairings. I love every bit of interactions that they all have here.

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I can't wait for the ZoSan in the next chapter! I love how Law is protective of Sanji! I love this entire chapter~ And we all know who is going to come with Law, maybe I just hope it's Luffy or Robin, since she is calm. Belated Happy Birthday :)

That's Luffy, one minute he wants to rip your head off, the next he wants you to join his crew...

Room creeps me out. That and Buggy's power, it's just a personal thing, I guess.

This was just tragic.

Ace not only doesn't care if he dies, as long as Sabo has a chance to be free, (which I doubt he does, knowing Blackbeard), he seems to want to die. His life here is even worse than that in canon... I've been struggling with depression for years, I think most people do, but all of us have different reasons, different pains. Ace is totally helpless and has no real hope for himself, he's an abused slave, a prostitute, rape victim multiple times over and a social and legal outcast. His only reason for living is to try to help his brothers any way he can. He doesn't want to hurt or suffer anymore, he just wants the pain to end. I hope he can find freedom in a way other than death. Maybe he can even find some happiness...

Marco is miserable too, he just hides it better. Immortality can be a curse, when you're the only one who has it. Watching everyone and everything you love fade away and die and not being able to stop it... I can't imagine that. I take it he was following or had someone following Ace, and that's how he found out Ace what at Shanks' club?

The only way Ace could kill Marco would be if Marco let him, and if Ace could bring himself to murder a man who had been so kind to him in cold blood. Marco might not want to live too badly, but he wouldn't want an innocent like Ace to get his hands bloody and stain his soul like that, and, as much as he loves Sabo, I can't see Ace going through with it. I hope they can find a way out of this nightmare together.

Blackbeard deserves to suffer for what he's done, not just to Ace and Sabo, but to all of his victims. If there is a Hell in that universe, he belongs there.

It wasn't all depressing, Shanks' obsession with Mihawk is great. He stole his tooth brush?! The whole 'hidden alter to your secret crush' thing can be a bit creepy, but this was funny. And Luffy is almost always good for a laugh.

Poor Law, I don't like people touching me either, especially when they're disembodied hands from God-know's-where that have touched God-know's-what...

Glad to see the update and read more of your work.

This is becoming one of my favorite fics. I really like the plots. You’ve not given up on this right?!