was it difficult to stop Cersei from escaping?If you describe a strong character then do it more logically

Armory Lorch and Holster Tully DDDDDDDDDDD
AMORY AND HOSTER - ITS TRUE

Naruto did not guess about Cersei's children, but knowing that Jamie is her lover? Where is the logic? Luvin and Robb found out but Naruto didn't DDDDDDDDDDDDD

I want to read a fic where it fully explains the outcome of Hiruzen growing a pair of balls

You wrote a quarter of a million word long fanfiction, and I have to give you props for that. Not an easy thing to do by any stretch of the imagination. But I just can't shake the feeling you could've written a much better one if you kicked off 20% of the words.

You have this weird thing you do with your sentence structure, where you start a sentence the right way deliver the information intended and than tack on a redundant final part which makes the sentence in question fall flat.

For example: "It was in a hidden compartment of my desk in my room"- as opposed to where, his roof desk.

"The correct term for myself to identify what I am, would be to call me Sage."- this feels like you're failing to properly start a sentence three times. "I am called a Sage" "I am known as a Sage" "My people would call me a Sage" would be far better alternatives.

"It took me years for the woman I would eventually call Mother to accept me as her son." - i mean what even is this?

"I would have to melt the sword down into nothing after I ran it through your tiny bitter heart" - ever heard a drunk person try to lay down a burn, this is what they sound like.

A bigger problem is the lack of character voices. They all sound the same (or rather read the same). They're you, or rather you in a paper thin, see through mask. I get it, it is a sort of a wish fulfillment story, but damn... No differentiation at all between them.

And last but definitely not the least problem. Naruto is everywhere. Everywhere. He is connected to everyone in this story. He made the White Walkers, he's Brynden Rivers' father, he made the faceless men, he knew Bran the Builder, he created the Children, and so on and so forth. Is the and to this fanfiction just the final scene concludes, Naruto drops the Henge and we find out that all the characters are actually Naruto's clones pretending to be other people. And finally Naruto just goes "Phew...man do I get up to some weird shit when I'm bored."

Nice

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Goooooooood

This story was good and I enjoyed it far more than your other Naruto/GoT crossover, especially since Naruto got to stay, well, Mark to (almost). There were some decisions he made that seemed to be there only to stretch out the story (like Dany not leaving Essos as soon as Robert died) but overall it was fun. However, the last few chapters feel rushed and a ton of concepts just call flat, with other logical or realistic options ignored. It was fun and I hope you enjoyed writing it but felt sort of meandering and aimless at the end of where there was no canon guidance.

So Narutos going to set up a Stark puppet with no experience with the Vale to swoop in and take over, using the claim of kinship to a woman who cuckolded and MURDERED the last lord? He's pretty much saying, "Yeah, Lysa and Cersei got it right, let's give a lordship to someone with minimal to no claim and who has no relationship with their new subjects." The logical thing to do would be to raise one of the existing Lord to paramouncy like the dragons did to the Tullys and Tyrells.

Wait, he wants to plunk 100,000 people who are totally unused to living in close confines (the "true" North is larger than the seven kingdoms combined) with other people or obeying laws, who are used to hunting and have no tradable skills on DRAGONSTONE, a small island (50 leagues) with minimal resources for them to use or industry to support them? The line of logic presumably being "The North doesn't like you guys, so as a favor to both of you in going to relocate you to a tiny, lifeless island uncontrollably close to the capital city and it's going to take years for you to intergrate or find gainfully employment. Your welcome!" It's like he's trying to create another war!

until the whole love story thing with dragon momma, i was on board, but after that, i dunno, i didnt feel like the story was building up to that, frankly i was hoping genrdy would be struck by her beauty or something, i dunno, i just feel having naruto stay as a outside 3rd party would have been better, thats just my 2 cents tho, you do you

Thank you for your time and work.

Enjoyed the AN