I loved the plot twists... Please continue the story... You are an amazing writer!

Fav'd and followed, it would be nice if you updated this sometime.

Continue

This was a fantastic start well done

update

I always liked it when I find a story where Ash sends home some Pokemon to keep his mom company , so far I've only found two other stories like that.
I've always like Polywag, it's turned into my favorite Kanto water type besides Lapres

Oh wow, didn't expect Team Rocket to be so sinister, evil, and dangerous in this story! Great work with this story so far. I think it would be cool if Ash got the Kanto Starter Trio in this story like he did in the Anime Canon! Great Work! Hope to see another update soon!

Great start!

Um hey I had a Pokémon request.

It's a shiny aron and a shiny weedle, magikarp and a Riolu along with a Zorua, among other shiny Pokémon

These Pokémon and other shines escaped from a Pokémon hunter planning on selling them to the highest bidders (they were near a river so Magikarp could swim)

They find Ash and he heals them then they start following him because they have no where else to go.

Name: Zee Barker
Gender: Female
Age: 11
Pokemon:
- Ivysaur - Pretty tough, knows lots of poison moves. He's slow but packs a punch
- Nidorino - Uses his horn to cream opponents. Close to evolving
- Vulpix - Recent capture, not bad. Super fiesty
- Poliwhirl - Pretty strong, and he's freaking lightning
- Onix - Her tank. She's a monster that just crushes enemies
- Fearow - Prefers to fly more than walk. Strong but bad defense
Rank: Beginner
Backstory: Basic trainer story. Started in Pewter City
Personality: Super bubbly when it comes to fighting, and she mainly tries to power through with all physical attacks and no status. Her pokemon are well cared for and she takes losing well enough.

I hope you like her! I thought she might be nice for SS Anne tournament.

um there are actually a few other ways misty could get from cerulean to viridian or pallet town either by other towns, surfing, or flying

your pokemon story is very intersting. good grammar and character. the Romance is quite pace. nice battle but it will be even better if you wrote it a bit longer. i like the way gary is going. when i first saw gary summary i thought he was jealous of ash close relationship with leaf. but now he is jealous of ash because he seem to be professor oak personal favorite. so now he want to prove his worth or best ash. so many road to choose. hope you continue.

To be honest, the cliffhanger was incapitating for a moment. But logically, Ash can't be dead. Its not only the fifth chapter, but the story is literally called "Ash's Story". Don't know how you're going to revive Ash but I know you will

I'll be honest, I kinda just jumped onto this story and don't really review so this is a first for me pretty much. I like the age range, as the main cast is definitely just a wee bit more mature while also throwing in hormones which can make 'em a bit wild but that's alright with me. This chapter and the last one actually remind a wee bit of Pokémon Origins. If you are using all versions of Pokémon as a basis and mixing them into one with some sugar I'm definitely going to enjoy this story a bit more. Anyways I'm probably typing up a storm so I'll just do us all a favor and just Favorite/follow before I type up an essay here.

DANM IT U CAN'T LEAVE IT HERE PLEASE UPDATE SOON!