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Ohhh! I absolutely LOVED that! XD It was soooo great! You really nailed it with this story because i think everyone wants to know what happens after they come back from Skandia! Thank you sooo much for writing this, and it would be great if wrote about Will's apprenticeship too! I mean we dont know what happens there either... John Flanagan let us make our own fantasies but we're too lazy soo... you mind doing it for us? LOL

Btw this is Kaitlyn Fairfax who is now Meralyn Fairfax because I changed my name, and I'm reviewing as a guest because I'm too lazy to even sign into my account...
I might change my name again too because it doesn't seem to fit... I don't have any imagination. *sighs*

Wow. This was awesome! Both chapters really felt like they belonged in the book. Reading it made me wish that they were. This was very nicely done and writen! You also did a really did a great job with all the character's personal voices.

Thanks for the tale!

Hey, Mrs. Knightley!

Very nicely done! I like the reunion with Gilan- after all, he blamed himself for Will getting captured (and Cassandra too), so it's nice that Will is finally able to talk some sense into him (or, at least, he can forgive himself now that Will and Cassandra are back safe and sound). It seems a little odd that Will was tired enough to turn in early but then stayed up hours later talking. Then again, it had been awhile since he saw Gilan and there will be plenty of time to sleep later (although, it would be funny if Halt had him up at the crack of dawn... :) ) Anyway, thank you for the lovely read!

-Ms. Zeal

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Hey, Mrs. Knightley!

Very nice! I agree, that does have a more finished feel to it. I think you did a fine job keeping Halt in character while he explained his very OOC actions in the book. I don't know why the author would do that, but you did a fine job fixing it.

Speaking of fixing, I think 'Sakandian' is misspelled in the first paragraph (or is it supposed to have three 'a's?) and the very last word of the chapter needs a 'd' on the end. :)

-Ms. Zeal