“red-haired” should be hyphenated.
“Snape’s Kool-Aid”, not “Snape’s cool-aid”.
“affected me”, not “effected me”.
“stress-filled” should be hyphenated.
As should “self-disgust”.
“than hurt you like that”, not “then hurt you like hat”.
“non-intentional” should be hyphenated.
“when it became clear”, not “went it became clear”.
“set your cap at him”, not “set your cap for him”.
“hoi polloi”, not “hoi poloi”.
“goodbyes”, not “good byes”.
AW! At Harry having indirectly kissed Luna’s cheek.

“it’s patient healer confidentiality”, not “its patient healer confidentiality’.
“sister-in-law” should be hyphenated.
As should “brother-in-law”.
“upfront” should be one word.
I’m so glad to have learned that Dobby survived the war.
“its upkeep”, not “it’s upkeep”.
“pursuit of the daughter”,, not “persuit of the daughter”.
“father-in-law” should be hyphenated.
“good for sixteen hours”, not “goo for sixteen hours”.

I do not know anything about the Harry Dresden fandom, so there might be errors that I miss completely because of that.
“must have woken”, not “must have woke”.
“took its toll”, not “took it’s toll”.
“Higher-ups” should be hyphenated.
Poor Susan Bones!
‘keep the sharpest eye out and call”, not “keep the sharpest eye out a call”.
“build-up” should be hyphenated.
“its true masters”, not “it’s true masters”.
So, Hermione killed Harry. Why? And how?

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

excellent

Three impressive first chapters, each unique. I'll be interested in seeing what you do with them.

I'm sorry, but I can't stand this collection anymore. ARE ANY OF THESE STORIES GOING TO HAVE HAPPY ENDINGS?! THIS MUCH ANGST MAKES ME WANT TO START PUKING OUT PIECES OF MY INTESTINES!

I quite like this. I would love to see it as a fully blown story, especially to see what happens next

then... Hermione either tells Ron that it was because Harry was so broken that she'd never had feeling for him (and they go on to be married with another best man) or tells Ron she'd given up hope Harry would have feelings for her (and gives Ron his ring back and spends the rest of her life looking for Harry) or something else.

Different from the more common love potions betrayal. I'm sure it was hard for Harry to separate himself from the children he has raised, but impossible to live with the reminder of the betrayal at least until he'd dealt with it himself.

I think an easy way to deal with the sorting would be to have the boy intercepted while getting off the train and taken away to due to a "family issue". Once separated, he could be told his mother had been arrested and he'd be able to return to the school after her trial... or whenever his name was known.

Hmm. That's a cliff hanger if there ever was one. Having just come from a story where Harry made a quip about Hermione's "Saving Harry Thing", Hermione killing Harry is quite the juxtaposition. I guess the question starts with whether she killed him by choice, accident, omission, or something else.

Wow! - Just Wow! As you noted, the idea of Harry being asked to be Hermione and Bilius' best man while not-so-subtle hints that he and Ginny should make it a double wedding have been written before. Harry's - I hesitate to say retconning, but that's what it will seem like to his listeners - shows his feelings while remaining true to the events in canon (with the exception of what thoughts are shown in canon). This is the Harry I wish had been. Smarter than anyone thought; in love with his best friend and not willing, at her engagement party, to keep the lie of his feelings alive.
I would love to see you, or someone else, take this on from here... The group's reactions after they're released... How things go from there for them - maybe until their children leave for the first time on the Hogwarts Express... And then Harry's life wherever... I think it would be a stronger story if he never got back with his friends and they never found a trace of him... I've run through my head a few times about Harry leaving due to Hermione and Ron and becoming a park ranger in a combined magical/muggle wilderness park (In the Americas or Australia or New Zealand for example) and live without much human contact. Please announce if anyone takes your premise and works with it! Take care!

Except that since harry is dead the prophecy has been fulfilled and anyone can kill voldemort.

Poor Harry!

excellent start I can't to read this one if ever post it