Wtf is this shit

Incredible. Wow. Unbelievable. This story has it all.

Horrific story writing with batshit numbers of people to keep track of? How random people I don’t even care about tend to drop in, say a couple of lines, be badass and fuck off right after? Not to mention the boatload of rosters of aforementioned wannabe one-hit-wonders that appears every other chapter? Check.

Too many references from other media? Not even good ones too - you just slap them on there for shits and giggles. COD, Kancolle, even fucking Fairy Tail? Way too many to list on two hands, my dude. Check.

Wanton sex and violence? You know what I mean, what with the COD dude and the Neptunia girl hooking up in the later chapters? Not to mention the complete derailment of the witches’ personalities and character development as they stroll around killing every man and creature in their way, not even talking about how it feels to kill a man? Yoshika is supposed to be a pacifist, dammit! Check.

A shameless Mary Sue who hogs all of the screen time and has absolutely no real conflict to make up for ruining most of the story? The most she’s ever dealt with was getting hurt while failing to notice her senpai wanted to bang her. Also, COD SAS? Seriously? If you wanted to add them in you had to at least get the organization right. Soap should be 2IC to your Sue in your fic, not Ghost. Check.

The seemingly perfect logistics? How do you expect a gajillion supply trucks from all over the world to fit into one tunnel the size of Brandenburg Gate? Or the fact that all your troops are equipped with different guns and have to ask for specific ammo and parts. Supplying five armies is a logistical nightmare that you completely gloss over. Check.

The complete lack of respect and xenophobic bloodlust against the people of another world, completely disregarding the ramifications of leaving with all of the newly-created orphans who will be immensely pissed with the people of SW Earth? Not delving into the potential of fighting one hell of a guerrilla war due to your world’s insane bloodlust was a big missed opportunity. Check.

You know what I would have liked to see in this? A depiction of a long, drawn out, costly war that reflects the the difficulties of adjusting to fighting a fellow man than monster. The real consequences of wiping a fraction of the male population off the face of the Earth, and how they affect both worlds. The killers and the killed. Not some fairy tale slap slap fights that end in world peace. Think about the ecosystems! Will the grass grow taller or wither once the dragons and ogres are extinct?

The closest you could get to that was the Napoleon arc at the end, but that was half-assed, with you trying to somehow relate the suffering of Hex witches with the Holocaust. I just couldn’t care about what happened to them because you know what? They only appeared for one chapter, then promptly fucked off. I think that’s the main issue with your story. You can’t just throw random shit at the wall and expect some of it to stick. Because that’s exactly what you did.

I’m sorry for being harsh on you, but I’ve only seen one other person give an in-depth review. The other people who just shit on you without giving a good cause? Don’t mind them. Anyways, I also apologize for not making an account to associate with this. For that, I can give no reason.

wow man, i never though you are so young. I mean your story is really good so i assume you are some adult with experience.

Now, with the ooarai battalion on the battleground, for the enemies, it wil be the end!

Good so far I'm looking forward to the next episode

Welp there goes my favorite battleships RIP Pennsylvania and Nevada, survived two 21kt nukes in real life and were scuttled. Here all it took was a singular massive shell.

I already read the entire story. It's like a jar of desserts without a label. It was all over the place. It was rushed at most parts with poor context.

But for some people who said something like "You don't like it, don't read it.", then sorry every story need at least one critical analysis.

Therefore, my analysis is really easy to describe the entire story.

It was shit. End of story.

Welp, I saw the name Rear Admiral Jingles and I lost it. Thank you for that, since I'm a fan of Jingles, I'm glad you included him. Cheers.

I have read through the entire story. near to the middle to the end, I find it an utter clusterfuck of characters from all sorts of media (Video games, other anime, etc.), making it difficult for a simpleton reader to follow. Basically, it's just get too complex.

*Spoilers ahead (if you can call them that) about some characters*
So this was quite the ride.

The story was good , it made me cringe , it made me laugh , there were spelling errors but I won't blame you as all the stories I read had some sort of spelling error.

The introduction of multiple characters from games such Karl Fairburne from Sniper Elite and others and from other animes such as the girls from Kantai Collection(assuming you took the idea of ship girls from that) was quite the surprise.

I can understand people that say this is bad for many spelling errors and the clusterfuck of things should understand that not everyone is a native speaker of English and should expect said errors. And the introduction of said multiple characters from various games and animes is their idea. They wrote this story/fanfiction , they have the right to write it as they want. Don't like it then don't read it.

And the fact that you took your time to finish is a great accomplishment because I read many stories that were never continued after months or years and had great potential.

So my final score is a 9.50/10

Trash story delete pls. Following canon to a T. Shoulda nuked the other world to bits.

WTF?! DID I JUST READ?! OMFG...Should have nuke the japs to bits.

So many characters from every anime, fantasy, etc! TBH, it's annoying...

Why on Earth did you put some modern weapons? Why there's UH-60 Blackhawk? A Scar-H? A C-130? Why? XD

Yeah! D-Day style! But without bunkers and naval artilleries and some Krauts (Germans) with some damn Waffen-SS (I kinda want to add letter A on the SS first part)