beautiful

THIS CHAPTER WAS AMAZING. By the way narrating out loud really adds spice to the fanfic. you rock.

Humph I wanted to see where this went but whateves

That was absolutely hilarious! I swear I couldn't stop laughing XD

OML XD "My yaoi senses are tingling"

CUTE

yoai senses xD

Wow, that kiss was hot... That's all I can say. (My brain just short circuited sometime during the story so I am no longer capable of forming actual words. All I can do right now is drool.)

This fic should have been rated M? Why didn't you do that? Why did you place a T rating just to leave us readers hanging?! Whyyyyyyy?! XD

But seriously though, good job! Keep up the good work!

This story sure was funny as heck! I loved it! There were a few places where you had a punctuation problem but it's all easily fixable. (It hardly disrupted the flow of the fic).

What you wrote seems like it would happen if Natsu and Gray got ahold of FF. Sure, there was A LOT of cursing involved in this story (I mean, I kept coming across the words fuck and dick all the time heheheh) but that could just be considered a regular reaction for them. Boys will be boys :)

I CANT I CANT I CANT OMG WHAT JUST HAPPENED? THATS IT IM DEAD, I DIED.
IM IN HEAVEN.
IM IN YAOI HEAVEN.

I love those two 3
This was a great fic

I'm scared for life ...

I don't care if it is T cuz it's the sexiest T I've ever read! XD Oh my. XD I loved it. I KNEW natsu would attack gray with a kiss the gray teased him. and I loved that line where you described that the boys kissed like they fought. *Erza must have died of nosebleed lol.
and natsu bit feat out of love or instinct?
Dark

oh my god this was so greeeaaattt! I was laughing and squealing so hard i was scared my mom would come down and be like 'wtf' I loooovvveddd thiiisss soooo muucchhh!

I loved this so much.
Erza's yaoi sense... Bahahahaha.
This was perfect.