| Reviews for Tomboy and Player |
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  Guest chapter 5 . 8/4/2017 That's it! |
| Guest chapter 3 . 4/4/2017 Evil! Pure evil! |
| luna chapter 5 . 2/17/2017 watashi ga kono sho ga daisuki koshin shite kudasai |
| Natsu chapter 5 . 1/29/2017 Hey when are you gonna update the 6th chapter |
 Writer and Reader D chapter 3 . 8/5/2016 WHYYYYYYYYY AJABFO{ADBFUAV{VFU{AOGV |
| LordVanity chapter 2 . 11/30/2015 "the biggest play boy in the world. He's known as "The King of Players" and I'm not talking about sports players. Well, he is the best at sports in Fairy Tail, but I'm talking about love player. He flirts with every girl. He's gotten almost every girl in school to fall for him, but he doesn't go out with a single one of them. When girls confess to him, he rejects them saying that every girl is the same." LMAO KING OF PLAYERS MY ASS! A REAL PLAYER HITS AND QUITS THE WOMEN! HE JUST FLIRTS WITH EM AND DOESN'T EVEN DATE LOLOL |
| MJJK46 chapter 5 . 11/28/2015 OH MY GOSH! That was such a good chapter! I can't wait for the next one. Thank-you for writing such an awesome chapter! |
| BlueFiestaMockingjayPie chapter 4 . 9/7/2015 WHY YOU MAKING ME CRY |
| Sabertooth7 chapter 4 . 9/7/2015 Like it |
| MJJK46 chapter 4 . 9/6/2015 Awwwwww! That's so sweet/sad T-T that was really awesome! I can't wait for the next chapter! |
| xSnowElfx chapter 3 . 9/4/2015 When's the next chapter |
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/1/2015 no it was birllant but bad grammer |
| MJJK46 chapter 3 . 7/31/2015 OMG cliffhanger! XD I LOOOVE this story. I can't wait for the next chapter! It makes me really happy to see the small amount of grammar/spelling mistakes and it makes it so much easier to read. |
| FallenMeteor chapter 3 . 7/30/2015 Plot twist! You evil person D,: *cries in corner* I think in the next chapter, you will really be able to apply some Imagery techniques and emotive language to really engage the with the reader, making them feel and imagine what Lucy is going through. |
| FallenMeteor chapter 1 . 7/30/2015 I like this Idea a lot! It has a lot of potential and with the addition of longer chapters I am sure you will gain more followers faster. On a constructive note, I suggest you use more techniques in your style of writing in these upcoming chapters. For instance: metaphors as you describe the new house and its surroundings in Lucy's narrative voice; hyperboles to exaggerate the change in a good/bad way in Lucy's lifestyle; and emotive language to bring out contrast and develop Lucy and her Mother as characters. Using emotive language, you could also tie in some comparisons to what the people and feelings of your main characters were before the move and after. Nice start so far, I am looking forward to watching this story develop. |
