this was pretty good not sure I understand the whole thing though.

You captured Aravis' character very well and this is a situation I could completely see her going through. Lovely descriptions, as always. :)

very good

amazing! Lovely introspection!

This is a well written. The part about Aravis's clothes and her scars was very descriptive, and I like the scene where her mind went back to the slave girl that was punished because of her. She reminds me of Ruth who left her mother and country in order to stay with her mother in law.

Very well written as always! I never really thought about Aravis' reaction to her scars.

This is very nicely done. Aravis is always an interesting character, and I think you've portrayed her very well. :D

A very well written piece on a simple short moment. It's meaningful, which is basically what I search for in stories. Though it didn't deviate much from what I'd anticipated after reading the summary, I still rather enjoyed it. You have a great flow of writing. :) thanks for sharing!

Oh my gosh, sempai:) I was thinking about that song, but I didn't think that was what it was based on...

I really like this:) the part where she did the "wrong" curses. I wish it was a little longer, but hey - it's a awesome without extra length:)

So beautiful, Ariel! Love it!

That was lovely Ariel,
I like the glimpse into Avaris' anxiety and feelings of brokenness. She seemed a little unnaturally cocky in the book at times and yet I know that deep down inside she had feelings of distress and fears, she was just good at hiding them.
You have captured that well.
I like it that she is concerned about her scars, and they briefly remind her to the similar ones which she left her slave to receive. If it were me I would be smitten by reproach, but you have wisely left her still rather unmoved by the fact that Kezia may well be having the same thoughts as her right now. She is still proud and self-centered even though Aslan has begun his work of humbling her. I like her for the potential she has rather than for who she is right here.
That is as it should be.
Thank you for giving her such joy to overcome her negative thoughts, when she remembered Aslan. It was a lovely way to end.
My vote, since I never do polls on peoples sites (too computer-illiterate), is that you do another one of Avaris and Shasta having a good old fight, just like on their journey together, but perhaps secretly feeling quite proud of what eachother are becoming. I love Lewis' little ironic comment about them deciding to get married so they can do it (quarrel) more conveniently. Don't do any romance stuff. That would spoil it. Just perhaps some rivalry and frustration along with misunderstandings which show them as they really are a few months after this one.
*Hopes you don't suspect that what she is really asking for is a sequel...*

This is nice and I adore that song!