First, please let me tell you that I loved this, and I'm so glad someone is still writing Eureka ff! I thought that you did a great job with Zane's confusion and lust and anger - none of which are easy emotions - and the juxtaposition between what was really happening in this timeline, and his 'memories' of the last timeline were handled really well.

Two nit-picky little things that pulled me out of the story:
Admiralty the office of the commander of a fleet of ships. I think you meant 'abnormality'
"Intensive Purposes" - the phrase is actually "intents and purposes"
Sorry about that - it's the English major in me rearing her ugly head!

Great job - really! Keep writing.

Fantastic - love how you got into Zane's head. I always felt that the show could have explored a way in which memories crossed over between the alternate universes, and this was a great way to show that!