So... I do agree with another reviewer's advice to not capitalize pokemon or any pokemon species names unless, you know, they're actually being used as names. But that's pretty minor all things considered.

I think this was a really good portrayal of Yellow as far as how the stress of what she went through on... Cerise Island, I assume (I'm relatively familiar with the manga, but it's been awhile since I've read it), would affect her. It's something I don't think a lot of (published) stories do much, and it was a nice touch here.

(Also, nice touch on the hair. Lol I have long hair myself, albeit not as long as Yellow's, and that struck me as a fun little bit of realism.)

I actually do wish we got more into Chuchu's head, particularly towards the end; like opinions and such. I wonder how she felt about having a name she could actually say? And now I'm kind of wondering where the flower came from and why she decided to "wear" it; it seems to show up a little randomly.

Likewise, I think there were places where it didn't... quite feel like it was in Chuchu's perspective, especially in first-person. The description of Yellow, for example. Since Chuchu is a wild pokemon and has spent all her time in the forest, I wonder where she picked up so much human terminology? And why she went that detailed, I guess.
(One last tiny nitpick on that front: "My black eyes caught sight of" just felt... off. I don't think the adjective needed to be there; it was a little bit jarring.)

But I know that this kind of POV is a difficult thing to pull off. It's hard enough getting into the perspective of human characters really different from you, much less non-humans, much less non-humans that (presumably) don't even have much of a lifestyle that resembles a human's. :P Good call on using scent as the primary sense Chuchu uses to find Yellow, and making use of the fact that her hearing was so much better than well, a human's.

Overall, short and sweet. :) I like this plotline, as light as it is. And yeah, it totally makes sense that Yellow would pick up pokemon by them following her rather than the other way around. XD And I like that little bit of empathy in "I knew that feeling" between Yellow and Chuchu. I know I just commented a bunch on how different a pokemon's perspective would probably be from a human's, but it's also important to note that some things are universal, like this. Especially with Yellow.

And hey, despite my critiques, this is still a good, cute little one-shot. Keep writing - I know you will but I'll say it anyway. :) The site could always use more stories like yours.

(This is me attempting to be a cheerleader. I'm not sure I'm good at it. Uh... go Saoirse go! *\o/*)

First off let me just say that I don't have any experience writing one shots so you should take my opinion with a grain of salt. I also apologize if this review feels short, but with such a short story it's hard to come up with lots of things to say. Overall, I thought it was really cute. Chuchu and Yellow are both in character which is great! However, I do wish it was little more eventful. I feel like the author wanted it to just be her idea of an event, which is totally fine and she has every right to do that. From my perspective though I wish there was a little more happening to help draw me in. I'm never left wondering: what will happen next? I want to feel something. There's never a problem in the story or at least there's never one that takes long to resolve. The other thing that bugs me is I don't know why Yellow was talking to herself in her room, but maybe she's just talking to Ratty and I missed that. Anyway, its a cute story. It shows us how Yellow and Chuchu could have met and why Chuchu is so devoted to her. All the characters are in character and all the actions seem justified. There just isn't much else and I guess for a oneshot that's okay. (Sorry if this was rambly, I'm having trouble organizing my thoughts.)

I like how you show all this context with Yellow's family in this view, it really works well for me and feels really creative, though at times it doesn't feel quite to perspective, I feel you could have Chuchu describe her actions more, so we get more a view of what she's looking at.

Aww...so kyoot!

Hehehe. Couldn't resist that, but this was a good fic. The ending seems somewhat weird though, and I can't put my finger on it...

A drabble is the term for a writing exercise of 100 words exactly.

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as "Hello," she said or "Hello!" she said, never "Hello." She said or "Hello." she said or "Hello," She said or "Hello" she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it's written as "Hello." She grinned, never "Hello," she grinned or "Hello," She grinned or "Hello." she grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," she said. "This is it." not "Hi," she said, "this is it." or "Hi," she said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," she said, "is it." The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don't use quotation marks with thoughts.

USE SAID.

Well, this is cute. It's nice to see Yellow as the sort of person who'd help a pokemon and then let it go on with its life, and it makes the pikachu's desire to help her out in return seem earned.

Excellent story, keep up the good work.

Dawww, that's so sweet. Excellent job, particularly in conveying Chuchu's alien and oblivious perspective of everything.