nicely written.I do like mage Hawke too damn bad you're stuck with Carver, though in fanfic you can change it so little sis Bethoney survives and Carver dies. I let him die in the deep roads so that during the kidnapping she save s Isabella. my rouge Hawke romanced Mirelle. I like the personality of your Adaar... Liara huh/ so let me guess femShep and Liara right?

Ah, my apologies, I'll keep that in mind in future chapters. Sie haben einen guten tag. [And that's about all my knowledge of German.]

I think the shooting and quick forgiveness, and lack of anyone else responding is more than a little stupid, but aside from that I liked it.
Also, I agree that very little was done with Hawke, however a desire to keep the spotlight from him/her could have been the reason for such.

Nitpick
fair chance on who knows [And who knows. I think.]
MAY be more mistaked [Mistakes :p.]