Wow, you're an incredible poet! I don't read poetry ... ever? ... except in English class? but I do like them there :) ... so this was a welcome change!
the fairytale bit was so cool - and I love the connection to the snow white symbolism and the title and it honestly makes so much sense. I really like everything about this fic. Bellatrix was so dark and the writing made me all sorts of moody. Perfectly done, nice job.

Wow, you are a great poet and you made me (I am sliiiightly anti-poetic) enjoy this a lot! :)
I loved the atmosphere you created here, very dark and mystic and it was easy to interpret what is happening here (at least I think it was clear ;D). The role Bella had in this poem definitely suited her, I really liked this! :)

This is really good - I really enjoyed reading this. I don't check out much poetry on here but I'm glad you put this up.

It's really dark, but it's quite fascinating. From what I gather, Bellatrix does everything to be with Lucius. She kills Narcissa and Rudolphus. I think Voldemort kills Lucius and Bellatrix poisons herself because she would do anything to be with him. I hope I got that right.

Oh, it's been a while since I last read poetry written as fanfiction :p
I really liked yours. It flowed really well, and it was written beautifully - I simply loved the comparison between Bellatrix and Snow White (and your title works perfectly with that too).
I did spot something - in the part in parenthesis after the second paragraph on Bellatrix, you have 'never see again the the light'... I think you need only one 'the' in that sentence :p
This was pretty great though (I just love poetry :p)
Cheers!

First of all I'd like to commend you for writing poetry, because I know I always struggle with that, so that's a plus already. I also really like that there are different layers in this poem, I read it several times and every time I realised something else, so well done there!

My only point of critique would be that sometimes the flow seems a bit off, mostly in the third lines of the stanza (more towards the end than in the beginning). Also, you're using different types of quatrains for your 'couplets' and your 'refrains' (aaba for the couplets, aabb / aabc for the refrains) and I feel it would be (even) better if you just used one type throughout, that would also create a more consistent flow.

I can see some (physical) resemblance between Bella and Snow White, even though in this story it is Narcissa who is described as being Snow White and Bella is the evil stepmother who's jealous of her. It's interesting that she's jealous at her from the start, but only breaks when Narcissa stands in the way of what she desires (Lucius).
It's also interesting that she doesn't even Rodolphus a second thought, he's just a nuisance.
Ah well, and once you've gotten rid of all the obstacles and then Voldemort destroys your chance at happy after, and that apple is right there, well...

This was beautifully dark, and dangerous, and well written. I got a bit mixed up and turned about somewhere in the middle of this, but over all it was really good.

I love the poetry. I love the phrase 'clean and deep' and the two line refrains of Bella's thought. Unfortunately I don't think I understand it completely since I got lost near the end.
So... Bella killed Narcissa, then she killed Rodolphus so that she could be with Lucius. But then something happens and she kills Lucius too, and the Dark Lord doesn't care about Lucius' death. But that's where I get lost because you call it a suicide fic but I'm wondering if Bella killed herself or Lucius killed himself or what?
Still a great job but maybe I'm just a bit slow in understand poems.

Oh wow... I'm so glad I started with this. It's so dark, and beautiful and well-written! Your asides gave this such a wonderful edge to it, and suited the 'fairy tale' AU so well. One of the best HP poems in the forum! Well done

I just love HP poetry and this is fantastic! Very well written. It suits Bella's character very much.

Lovely and amazing and everything good you can imagine! I love how dark it is and the way you turned the sweet fairytale into a tale of imagined betrayals and failed relationships. You manipulate the characters perfectly, and everything fits and seems real.
Thank you for writing this for me :) Again, it's amazing and you write beautifully.