Oh my god why would you do this to me? WHY?! Ugh, Thane, my baby, come here, I'll hold you!

Geez, this was heart-wrenching. In a lot of good ways, don't get me wrong, it's just...ugh, Thane, you lovely lizard man you. Okay, so I think you actually wrote Thane really well. His speech and his mannerisms are just on point! He's got this grace to him, and this precision to his words, which I always imagine as being very in-character for him. And the way he approached her was just so gentlemanly, it was beautiful.

I know I can't blame Sloan for turning him down, because her heart is for Kaidan, and I get that, but it still hurts, you know? I think she went about it well though. She didn't dismiss his feelings or get rude or anything, she just quietly and sadly affirmed that she couldn't be with him. Thane's understanding of her resistance was beautiful as well, because that's SO HIM. He wouldn't want to burden her with these feelings if she didn't reciprocate. But at the same time, his "I hope it won't offend you if I carry you in my heart" was just absolutely gut-wrenching in its simple tenderness.

Agh, I loved this! Sloan's musings were really insightful, and you really set up her mindset for the Omega Four Relay mission perfectly. I can completely understand her thoughts on not coming back, and her regret concerning Kaidan. Just a beautiful, heart-breaking piece. So good!

Beautifully written, as always.

Sloan's disappointment in Kaidan and the Alliance as well as her sadness seep through every sentence. And yet she misses him so much, it is heartbreaking. She seems so lonely and tired, exhausted even.

It is almost scary to see how resigned she is. To witness her saying her own quiet goodbye to Kaidan, because she had no intention of coming back, hoping he would be able to move on this time is gut-wrenching.

A very fitting oneshot to accompany The Reason. It gives insight into Shepard and clarifies the Thane story arc nicely. Great job!

Thanks for reminding me this was here!
There was a gentle sadness to this whole piece as Shepard buries herself in her memories. It's weaves nicely into Thane's own ability as a drell. His presence and his admission of his feelings were so sweet, it was almost sad that she had to turn him down. Almost, because of course the last thing she and Kaidan needs is another obstacle! It also says something for the deep love she had for Kaidan that even on the cusp of a suicide mission, that she can't bring herself to find solace in another.
It was heart-wrenching to see Shepard so resigned to dying again, and believing she had nothing to live for beyond that. It makes me root for her even more, so she can get back to Kaidan and be happy again.
Absolutely beautiful and haunting piece. :)

Heart breaking, moving, clarifying. Well done. You have a gift for writing emotion that draws your readers and makes them feel. Loved this.

This was so good - a clever mix of sexiness and seriousness.

This broke my heart all over again. It was so wrenching to read how disconnected and disappointed she is in the Alliance and Kaidan. The things that were her rocks have let her down. She's so tired and lonely that it just... breaks my heart. It makes my chest ache and brings tears to my eyes. She misses Kaidan so much that it hurts. I empathise with her completely, because you wrote her so well.

As always this was beautiful and well written. It gave an insight into Shepard that I think is fitting for a oneshot seperate from The Reason. I'm probably your biggest fan :D so I'm glad my constant chatter was helpful!

Wow, I really felt her sadness through this. Her fear that Thane felt something for her and not wanting to hurt him, the pain over everyone from her previous life pushing her away, the loneliness and grief all came across so clearly. You definitely brought tears to my eyes.

That last line is heartbreaking, in fact the whole thing is and yet there's a quiet finality to it that feels like she's at peace with herself. I got that life flashing before her eyes feel that people say happens when you know you're going to die. It was beautifully written.

It fits very well with The Reason and rounds out the Thane story arc nicely. Fantastic work as always.

This is awesome! Good work!

I'm so glad you decided to post this. It really is a great add on to your main story. I had a feeling this is what happened between Sloan and Thane but it's nice to see it written out. It was really well done as are all of your stories! You've really got a great talent, it's great that you're letting everyone else see it. I have to admit I did a little victory dance after she chose Kaidan. Don't get me wrong I love Thane! He's the best assassin out there! But it still felt good to know that she stayed faithful to Kaidan even after he was a complete ass. Maybe there's hope for them after all :). Now excuse me while I go geek out over your other writings.