Interesting ideas here, sorry you've abandoned it, it seems.

Too bad you didn't continue the story
I liked what I read, although there were several chapters that were not updated or they differed a lot from previous chapters, but the idea was good ...

regards

I have been looking for this fic for a long time. Lol. Seriously. Years. I don’t remember how far along I got but I always remembered that Hedwig was grandma adores and a lion was Charles. (I’m curious as to why you have ‘Jen’ throughout this chapter though.)

Although it is unfinished, I look forward to reading it. :)

I love your story. I hope you can and decide to finish it:)

are you giong to finish the story

your English is broken and poorly edited. your grammar needs work and if you have not taken 12 grade English don't write again unless you get a beta reader.

I could not read this with out trying to puzzle your sentences into coherent thoughts. great idea, poor writing.

i'm sad that you haven't updated in a couple of years and I really like this story so I really do hope you update soon

This story was the epitome of a great idea with poor execution as such it is unreadable. I loved the idea but I do have three points for improvement. 1: Get a beta to edit this. 2: Take your time to ensure continuity. 3: Language/word usage needs to be raised above the primary school level that you are using.

Oof. Unreadable.

Irritating twat that Hermione

Just some constructive critism, you fluctuate between the chapters with names such as Sirius calling his son Orion and then Ajax, among other names such as Doreas, Hermiones, Sirius wife ect. When jumping from one scene to another you should have a line to separate the scene jumps otherwise it's a bit to confusing. Check you spelling as well. You also have a few inconsistency's like Harry receiving his Heir ring from the bank and then getting it again from his grandparents. The only other thing is Harry's self harm, it's to chaotic and feels almost like you just threw it in their to add angst and doesn't help the story move forward al all. I wasn't able to read the whole story but the plot is awesome and generally a cool idea.

Good story please update

Update PLEASE I must know what happens

Good story. Interesting plot twists.
Please run it through 'Spell Check'.

are you going to finish the story