Not bad but I just can't get past the idea Ron is the competent one.
Good bye.

Ah yes, Mr. 'I hid my soul!' meets a setting where any competent assassin knows how to trap souls. Gotta love stupid arrogance. Also a fan of Voldemort's team of "Everyone with a grudge against our protagonists." I admit. And the checkovs gun of Seraphina's necklace being removed remains unfired, that ominus now isn't it?

But here's the question: Was this Voldemort the fragment in Harry's scar, or is the Dark Lord of the Potterverse already dead? (or at least mortal) I look forward to finding out. (Also the reactions to Mooneria, Lucinda, Ruby and Seraphina will be priceless.)

This has been a really enjoyable 77,009 words (give or take) and the fact there is a sequel up makes me a happy reader.

And Seraphina has her final revelation! I am squeeing here. I really am. Seraphina's perspective is always fun to read and a draconic intellect coming to realize the ignorance it would have had? Delicious. Also a dragon got whipped by special arrows, good tactics, summoned animals and a very upset papa wolf. So theres that too.

Drow are fun like that. "Hay, I'll frag this person you don't like and keep you safe for the low price of not backstabbing me until we're done." It makes it all the more frustrating when nine times out of ten they take the first opportunity to try it. The remaining tenth are worth working with.

Seraphina reminds us she is adorafying. (Adorable Terrifying) with just one evil Drow and a dagger. I'm honestly starting to feel sad for Ron though. If he'd just learn his lesson, (or, you know, there not been giant half-spiders) he'd finally get to be happy. (other then when eating.)

Of course bardic magic summons angels, are angels not the choir of heaven?

Seraphina again, makes me melt. It's exactly the lesson the young dragon needs to learn. It's funny, here we have this mostly comedic adventure, and it's the interpersonal drama of a comedic character that has me smiling and reading well past when I should sleep. Kudos on the in universe diary montage by the way, it really works here.

Dawww. Maybe it's the soft spot I have for Black Dragons from 3.5 D&D, but Seraphina is made of adorable to me. Yes, she's a selfish little killing machine, but that's the base nature of Neutral/Chaotic Evil. A brutal awakening to what suffering is like to experience, longing for closeness and some good role models? I think Seraphina is gonna be a fun character to get to know.

Nice finish. I wonder if Harry is carrying poison from the game or if Voldemort knows anything.

Nice, so maybe they only gain levels/xp when they directly are on their quest? Its confusing to me at the moment, but I'm sure things will be revealed in due time.

I think this plays nicely with every character. You can see the different levels of concern and behavior for everyone. An untested faith is hardly any faith is a great line. I'm sure someone has said it before, but I like that Luna said it and Hermione thought about it.

Its poetic what Luna did, but it didn't seem economical. I enjoy the opportunity the gang gets to educate Ron now that they have another story to tell of his bad decision making.

Amazingly presented. This chapter has all the tension of combat, not knowing things, fatigue, and its maintained at a high level through the whole chapter. It's great that all the girls behind the wall each wrote.

I'm a sucker for those fart jokes. Great juxtaposition with Harry's charisma and Ron the gag machine.

How have I not found this story before now? This is brilliant. Ticks almost all my favorite boxes for a story. Fantastic.