This is really good! I wish you would write more. I hate when authors just suddenly stop writing and let their accounts die out like this. It’s very sad.

Here I am! Too bad I couldn't be first review.

Looking forward to more dogboat, hopefully it gets extra scary, like creepypasta level... well... maybe not that far... you're not clinically insane like that guy is :D

I reviewed, followed and fav'd. I'm either god or i sure as hell appreciate your work quite a lot... maybe both :)

So, i think it was a good start. A lot of good descriptions regarding the surroundings and the robots. I like detailed explanations, so you got me hooked here.

The tension you created alone with this one chapter was really good. I really caught myself biting my fingernails, because i didn't know how far you would go :D I think there is a lot of potential there and i also think you can make it happen. It will be good :)

Only think i might criticize is the lack of info on the power and time you give. Let Mike look at the watch or/and at the power display. I think in later chapters when shit hits the fan it will be a good way to create even more tension. I do think you can pull it off though, You are badass and you can make it happen :)

So for a first chapter of a game i rarely played and a genre i sparsely read, i have to say well done mate. Keep it coming ;)

Phil

Interesting start to a good story