What kinda name is Callus for a horse?

also after callus's death, she also said oh shit. classic ellie. swearing more than angry joe

in the horse chase, she said come get me you motherfuckers. I know it's just a little mistake but it's more funny that way. just saying

Follow your story! :)

I love reading the winter chapter and the aftermath! :) I believe the children of the post outbreak are malnutrition do to shortage of food. I hope you will continue this story and write another just like this one maybe do one after Henry and Sam's deaths. I like the Preparatory school stories btw. :) (Cass87) too lazy to login. :)

Please continue it's really good! :)

This type of story may seem easy to write, but anyone who has tried will know how difficult it is to do well. To start off, transposing from the screen to words without missing out details and nuances and yet without having it read like a screenplay is hard enough in itself. And of course the problem that the reader (and the author, for that matter) has seen it all already so it's easy for it to get very boring quickly. What makes these stories for me then are the gap-fillers, or as Henry put it, "Gimme details! Describe it!"; insights into a character's behaviour or thoughts that aren't immediately evident. Yet, one must do that within the constraints of canon - in a narrative as strong and rich as TLOU's. And further still, all that in the Winter arc where the scenes are tightly packed without much time gaps for one to work in. No, not easy at all.

And you've done really well on the first count. The story flows nicely; you've chose well on what to leave in and what to omit. Done nicely with additional bits like the Ellie-Callus interactions. On the second bit then: there are some really good moments - I especially like Ellie's considering but not killing/robbing David in the first chapter, really interesting given that she doesn't hesitate to kill when attacked or in defence of Joel. A difference so fine as to be nonexistent for some, but for sure it's there for her. One gets the feeling of wishing you could've gone deeper with it, though it's really not your fault, for these things can only be moments in this type of story. At least, there's probably another story or several in some of those ideas.

Pity that you're ending this next chapter ("AND the aftermath"..?), though I am looking forward to it. It's one of the strongest moments of the game, so please do it justice!