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hehehe! Funny Chap!

I know you've probably been waiting for a review for a while now so I'm just gonna give you one.

I'm glad you're taking the time to fix your story. As much as I liked it before, I couldn't really remember everything that happened because I honestly somewhat skimmed through it (except the whole "OMG, WHY DIDN'T I REMEMBER YOU" ordeal between Youhei and Sakura.)

So just keep doing what your doing and take your time. At least I can read it as if I was an earlier follower of this story waiting for updates..

I just finished this anime...and this is making me want to make up my own OC and write through Clannad's storyline but I can't because reasons...(TOO MANY STORIES TO WRITE FOR ALREADY)
Anyway...can't wait to keep reading this!

Well, the scenario is good and interesting, but the wording is poor. You jump from one event to another without explanation of any kind. There are occasions there does not known which character is talking and sometimes combine the narrative in the first person and third person. If you correct these details, your story will be much better.

This story deserves more reviews. Its really good!

This just keeps getting better and better

Do you have an account?

Please make a sequel, I think that this has much potential. I can offer my help if you would like.

sorry that was me reviewing before I didn't realize I wasn't logged in XDDD Anyway seriously though please update soon o.o

Eeeep! This is getting exciting! Please update soon! :D

I'm excited about the new chara! :D

Tajami Ayame! Ooh, new character! X3