Give me your address and i will send you flowers...that ending was just beautiful.
PS Im just joking, if i wasnt, i would be labeled a creep

you know, even though i know that naru was betraying him, motoko and keitaro jumping to conclusions about some boy with a girl they know sounds kind of familiar...

Continue the story make keitaro confront naru about the cheating and give him a happy ever after with Mokoto

Hey,
found your God yesterday evening and read it through tonight.
While I wish you good luck with college, although I believe you might already got your degree twice by now, I'ok let youknow know that I have faith you will finish the story.
Don't keep me waiting :-P
Rgds

Caio

And he was never seen again.

I liked this well enough. Definitely needed a proofreader but the concept was a good one and a fresh idea for the fandom, to boot.

I can't believe you never ended this. god dammit!

You need to end this story!

all i can say for keitaro and motoko is this "busted"

I really enjoy this story. Still want to kill kentaro though.

Nice chapter.

Its too late to make amends for Naru, she still signed the contract, also she still showed that; she is the kind of girl who would go to a bit more extremes to get what she wants and if its promotion or a job position. She'll gladly sleep with that certain person, even if she had a relationship with Keitaro.

Sigh...

Yet again Keitaro goes with his senseless revenge plan.

Why cant he dump Naru already? There are others with feelings for him too and yet he is oblivious, all the while hurting them.

She made it clear she will do anything to get a position at Tokyo by doing favors for Kentaro. She seemed like the girl who would sleep with the boss just to get a promotion.

Naru is only feeling guilty just because they found out.

Naru gets the best girlfriend award!

Take her "doormat" boyfriend to a date and then dump him when the typical rich guy meets with her in front of her so called boyfriend and calls for a special meeting. That has to be the worst kind of shame for Kei.

Once a doormat, always a doormat, eh!

The revenge is pointless, whats to gain there? There is no point in trying to win her over again.

In the last chapter, Naru had already made the choice of rejecting Keitaro and leading him on false hope. All the while, having plenty of time and still only to accept a date with a different guy named Kentaro.

Naru has already made her choices clear by playing with his feelings. I say, Keitaro should just quit relationship with such a confusing girl like her, who has issues with trusting him. She seems to trust Kentaro more, who is more of a stranger than Keitaro. I suppose she likes that he is rich and would allow her to live lavishly.

If Keitaro gets serious, he can make a stable income. But it can only be achieved if he stops being such a pushover/doormat..

I wonder if Kentaro would find Motoko attractive, I mean, to me at least she seems like a traditional Japanese beauty, compared to her Naru already seems "insignificant".

I just found this story today and spent most of my day reading it and if this was a movie, I would have thrown my hands up and left before this chapter. I'm wondering how you plan to save this story at this point!... Because I kept reading it in hopes you'd fix it at some point but I was wrong.

...I'm sure you're wondering why I'm complaining, well after reading this I 'hate' Keitaro. The guys an utter a for leading Motoko on and not getting to the bottom of Naru's problem. As a boyfriend and possible future one to Motoko he's trash and deserves neither of them. He's after revenge for something he's aware of yet he plans to continue his revenge... He hurts Motoko if he chooses Naru, he hurts Naru if he chooses Motoko and he's a total idiot if he chooses neither of them, that would hurt both of them. Sorry I can't follow the logic or the reasoning behind the revenge angle.

Sorry for the negative review but after wasting my day reading this I had to vent my frustrations.

BTW: The first few chapters were amazing. You drew me in and hooked me very early. Love your writing style and how you seemed to develop an interesting story early on but somewhere along the way I feel the story got away from you and to me that was a shame.