Nice story, a really solid writing style that's easy to follow and the concept behind it was well executed.

It's a really solid story, overall, and I think you did a quite good job of writing Tali's 'confession' piece.

My only recommendation would be to try and diversify your identifiers after dialogue, by adding some description to tone or body language and the like.

I like it! Very strong writing, really gets into the character's head and feel her emotions. :)

I think that piece deserves a review at least :)

The whole idea is great. It as a little fluffy piece. I like the idea of Tali sending Shepard a message to tell him her feelings. The message thing is definitely something Tali would do. I just like the idea. That it had a happy end just the better ;D

Regarding the writing itself i can't help you xD I'm not a native speaker myself, but from what i read, i think it is pretty good.

So, overall a very good little piece i would say. Hope you are continuing this Talimancing stories
Keep them coming!

Phil