Aw, like all good things, this story must come to an end :( I think the way you have brought the story around full circle by showing the progression of time as Pan-Steve grows up and marries and has a child of his own has been fantastic. The only minor caveat I have is that you mention he has two children and we know nothing of the second child. That he sends Michael away I can understand, but what about the second? It seems fussy, I know, but it is just something that struck me as I finished reading the story.

I like how here: ((He could feel the wear on his bones and the ache in his joints. After so long on Earth, time was finally catching up with him. It had been an excruciatingly slow process, but it had happened at long last.)) you illustrate the passage of time and show the wear that it puts upon the body, as well as the heart and soul. Steve-Pan acknowledges this, along with that he has lived a relatively good life despite losing Tink and Wendy and the pain he caused so many with his choices.

This line: ((A sigh passed his lips and his hands trembled with emotion. Tinker Bell had promised she'd come to get him. When would it be his time?)) is bittersweet and sad because it shows how ready that Steve-Pan is to go home. The years have taken their toll, he's old, sick and tired. He wants to move onto a better place, somewhere with sunshine and happiness instead of the bitter cold reality he's living now. To that end he waits for Tink to come and get him, as she'd gotten him when he'd been a lost boy, but this time he is wondering when she will come rather than being surprised when she did as a kid.

((With a smile, he led the trio into the night, headed for the second star on the right and straight on to morning.))-I just love how you finish the story with this line. This was not a story about Steve Rogers-First Avenger. This was a grand adventure of Peter Pan, the Boy Who Didn't Want To Grow Up. You remind us of that here and remind us that there is another adventure waiting when we pass from this life to the next.

In all, this was a very imaginative and innovative piece that applies fantasy and magic to the myth of Captain America and the rest of the Avengers. Absolutely wonderful job!

Poor Steve-Pan :( he's just learning about how difficult the real world is. The real world is a cold and unfeeling one at times that takes friends away to a place that we cannot immediately go. He's already buried Wendy, but now he has had to bury Tink-Tasha as well. Of everybody in the story, it is Tink who is with Pan the longest. It could even be insinuated she's the closest to him since she's been with him so long. Losing Tink is almost the final straw for Pan, until age arrives, like a beacon to show him that they will see each other again. And ((Since Wendy considered death the last great adventures...)), Steve-Pan believes her.

Tasha-Tink here: ((She rolled her eyes. "Would you stop being sorry already? I got to live because of you."/"But the cancer…"/"That's what life dealt me.")) shows what a pragmatist she's become. She's still angry at Pan for lying to her, but acknowledges she'd never have lived if not for him and the choices he made. She'd never have met Barton, not had her own children, not experienced a world vastly unlike Neverland.

(("I taught you to survive; you will survive.))-this is such a wonderfully Tasha line to me lol it's no nonsense and telling Steve to get his head outta his ass or else she's going to kick him all over Neverland once they return.

((One day you'll be with us again. I promise you that, Peter Pan. And when that day comes, then, and only then, we can all go home."))-I love that this line essentially defines what Heaven is for Steve-Pan and Tink-Tasha. Heaven is home. And what is home? Neverland. So returning home to Neverland after he leaves the real world is his reward for the service he gave to that world.

This chapter ended on a bright, but still sad note. Both Wendy and Tasha-Tunk are gone and Steve-Pan is dealing with their loss. However, just when he thinks he's all alone and has nothing left to look forward too, Tink arrives to tell him that he will see Neverland and all those people he loves and misses again. Fantabulous job!

The way that this chapter showcases two different friendships is wonderful. You have Tink-Tasha and Steve-Pan have a heart-to-heart that allows them to make some amends to their broken friendship before you have Foxy Stark show up to confront Pan. The tension between Tony and his onetime leader and friend is palpable and understandable. Tony feels betrayed, like he got dumped because Pan selfishly chose a half-existence to stay with Wendy and ended up killing Bucky and Tink both because of it.

I really think that this here: (("I've lived a good life. I married a good man. Without you, I never would have met Clint. I never would have had children. I think secretly, I wanted this for myself. Maybe that makes me selfish, but you shouldn't feel bad for it. I got to live.")) is the most honest Tasha-Tink has been with Steve-Pan beyond when she expressed her anger at him for not telling her the whole truth. She's telling him that she forgives him because she had something she might never have had otherwise. She might not have had her own children, a husband, love, or lived a life outside battling Hook and the Indians.

((The boy crossed his arms. "So the rumors are true. You're such an asshole."))-LOL this is sooooo Tony at his snarky finest! I almost wanted to have Steve react as an adult would and take Tony to task for cursing, but that would ruin this moment in my mind. This is a Lost Boy confronting the once Pan and seeing how he'd been forsaken, abandoned and for what? Everything that Pan once had stood against. Pan had done the unforgivable-he'd grown up.

((Michael had been bullied again. Just because he had an imagination instead of an iPad automatically made him the outcast.))-the realism in this and how you connect a reads on for why a kid gets bullied really work for me. It adds that touch of tissue that brings this story into the present. This isn't the 1940s, where the threat was coming from another country. This is the 2000s, a place where the threats are in the school yards and out on the everyday streets.

((He blinked and looked at Tony. "Take him."/Tony flipped backwards, his eyes wide. "What?"))-I giggled at little Tony here. This was just a wonderful rendering on Foxy Stark. I can easily imagine his confusion and stupefaction at being asked by the former Pan to take his son with him to Neverland. Clearly he doesn't understand why, given how Pan gave up Neverland for the real world. Yet he takes the boy, still having just enough faith and respect for Pan that he trusts him about this being best for the boy.

Another fantastic chapter! Can't wait to read about what happens next!

Ah, a chapter of revelations. Poor Steve, learning that his Wendy-Peggy had loved him all along but was just as prideful as him in a way by not telling him sooner, or calling him to her sooner so she could tell him. Her statement here: (("Not staying in Neverland with Peter Pan is something that I have regretted my entire life, because when my love finally returned, I was too far gone in the grasp of old age to fly away with him.")) really epitomizes just how much they both screwed up having what they most wanted out of life: each other.

Them not ending up with each other also causes a lie to be born, one that ultimately changes the fate of a lot of other people-Tink most especially. Her anger and resentment over not being told, over being fed a lie is understandable, as is her asking Steve-Pan to leave and never show his face again. She ultimately has lost the most: Neverland, her magic, her friends and family. And why did she lose all those things? Because she chose to stay with Pan, to be loyal and remain with him until the end. And it was all for a lie.

((He hated death, and feared the old.))-I think that this is something we all can relate too. Getting old sucks, plain and simple...but watching someone we love getting old is the worst. There's a sense of helplessness in watching someone become stopped with age. We cannot stop it, we cannot change it, we cannot do anything but watch.

((Natasha screamed at the top of her lungs—a sound he could only describe as agony and suffering—as she tugged on her red hair.))-loooooove the expression of her hurt and anger. This goes beyond simple rage, really. Pan basically betrayed her in a sense by not being upfront and honest about his reasons for staying. He told her it was for Moira, allowed her to believe he was in love and then finds out it was really for Wendy and that he didn't really love Moira as much as he claimed. It's the ultimate of betrayals and the final thing Tink is able to withstand before she severs her ties with him forever.

((First he'd lost Wendy and now he'd lost her as well.))-Losing the two people next to his son that he cares the most about is emotionally hard on Steve. He knows he screwed up, that he hurt Tink with his choice. He also knows her kicking him out of her life is justified, he deserves it and accepts it as her choice despite how much it hurts.

This line: ((If there was one thing he'd learn in the past thirty years, it was that despite the feeling of being lost, his son had taken away some of that pain. Watching his excitement over new things or his innocence gave him a reason to live.)) showcases a father's love and his pride in the child he's brought into the world. I can see Steve-Pan loving being a father. I can see his son being his bright spot, and someone who makes the hurt just a bit less. There's just one minor problem I have...you say he has two children, but the son is the only one mentioned. It feels like the boy is the only one that Steve gives a crap about, and I don't think that is so. Not saying you need to change anything or it's wrong...just my interpretation and I could simply be reading into things.

In all, this was another fantastic chapter that introduced us to an old enemy who ends up actually feeling sorry for Pan at the end because of what he has lost.

Hi there! Aw, it is Steve's wedding day! I really like that in this chapter we get how the progression of time has operated. We know that six years passed from the previous chapter and that more time has passed since. We now know that Steve-Pan has reached a level where he's proposed marriage to Moira. It should be a happy time in his life but isn't because at the core, Steve knows it's all a lie. He doesn't love Moira as he loved Peggy, and he wants to go home to Netherland, but knows he can't have either. So he settles for what he can have-a world where Peggy is at least in it and he can be around her. At the same time, his guilt over having cost Tink her powers for what has turned out to be selfish reasons only compounds his feelings of guilt further. In all we see how his wanting to be with Wendy has cost everybody-the Lost Boys are without Pan, he's without his Lost Boys and Tink has given up her powers as well as her belief in love because they've lost Neverland and their innocence.

This here: (("Wendy—"/"After all this time you still cannot call me Peggy?")) shows how even though time has passed and Pan has now become Steve that it's still engrained in him to call her Wendy, not Peggy. This shows how intrinsic things can become. Steve-Pan is operating on what is familiar even after so many years have passed.

(("Don't even suggest I love Clint.))-Okay, we won't suggest it, but we're all thinking it ;) what I like with this statement is how Tasha is essentially trying to deny what she feels and letting Steve know she won't entertain any of his notions about love. In fact she gives on to say: ((Barton is a friend, a… partner.)) and specifies that: (("...love is for children... He keeps me occupied through the long nights.")) Every statement is meant to keep Barton from getting close to her. Love has failed her once already and left her without Neverland, without magic, without her friends or Pan. Also, compartmentalizing Barton keeps him at bay while allowing her to enjoy the relationship they have.

Tasha officially reminds us about how Steve's wedding day (("...officially marks the end of our Neverland experience.")) and that his becoming a married man means that it is (("Best)) to ((leave the childish games behind us now...)) because ((Those days are long over.")) marriage is the final step into adulthood and ensures that childish games are forever left in the past.

Steve-Pan's guilt here: ((In his one decision to spend his life as close to Wen—Peggy as he could, he had changed the course of fate for Tinker Bell, his oldest friend./"I'm sorry I was so selfish.")) shows us how aware that he is of what his choice has cost someone close to him. He knows that his decision to stay in the real world, to stay by Wendy has made Tasha-Tink very unhappy. She cries herself to sleep at night (when she's not being comforted by Barton), has nightmares, and is no longer the happy Tink she'd been before he'd made a decision hindering now upon a lie.

Another amazing chapter m'dear! Fantabulous job!

Hi again! :)

Even with this chapter being super short, you establish so much with it. You show how Tink-Tasha is moving on, how she’s becoming a normal and regular human woman, developing relationships and moving on with her life. On the other hand, Steve is struggling with moving on, with forming relationships and getting comfortable in his new grown-up skin. The line: ((He’d been Steve for six years, and some concepts he just couldn’t wrap his mind around.)) spells it all out. He’s been human for six years but he hasn’t yet come to understand attraction or the way in which people form interpersonal relationships. He’s still very much a naïve and innocent boy in that regard and doesn’t have Neverland to run off too when things get rough.

This line here: ((He bolted from the room so fast for a moment he thought he was still able to fly.)) shows how much he’d love to be Pan in that moment. He believes that he hears Tink-Tasha having a nightmare and goes to help but discovers that she’s not having a nightmare at all… nor does she need him to come and comfort her really. His embarrassment is palpable, as is Tasha’s and her beau’s shock and surprise to be caught in such a compromising position. Even though you feel sorry for Pan and empathize with him for wanting to be a good friend considering all that Tink-Tasha gave up for him, you can’t help but laugh at the situation in general.

((Why was it that he had lost his flight, but couldn't have lost his keen hearing as well?))—Ouch… I have actually been here and I can say that I completely empathize with Pan-Steve at this moment :/ this is really… uhm… *coughs* uncomfortable. That Pan-Steve is finding it so connects him with me as a reader and gives us something that we can bond over and be united about.

((Being around Peggy calmed him.))—this works to remind people about how close that Peggy and Steve are. They are more than just friends, but they are not lovers. Not that it matters, of course. Their relationship is based upon years of friendship and partnership and he finds comfort and quiet just being in her simple presence.

What I like with this section here: (("No, ma'am. I like it here," he said softly. "I want to grow up."/He told himself the last words so often, he almost believed the lie.)) is that Steve recognizes it as a lie, but continues to say it anyway. It shows how much he wants to be with Peggy, about how hard he’s trying to be Steve for her… but he’s not happy and would honestly love to return home to Neverland.

In all, this is a very short chapter that shows us how hard that Steve is struggling with his new life. Fantabulous job as always!

Hi there! Back again ;)

The theme of this chapter is clearly friendship. You start that off by showing us how Tinker Bell-Tasha chose to remain with Steve, despite the fact that she’d have to give up Neverland and her powers. This line here: ((She told him she would be with him til the end instead.)) shows how dedicated Tink is to Pan-Steve and how much she’s willing to give up in order to fulfill her vow of being there with him until the end. On the other spectrum you have Bucky show up and at first not recognize Pan-Steve even though Pan-Steve recognizes him quite clearly. Then, once he does recognize the former leader of the Lost Boys, his anger and bitterness over Pan’s betrayal erupts.

Bucky’s feelings are almost reminiscent of those that Pan-Steve had felt over Wendy’s decision to grow up, but there’s an added twist: Pan actually did abandon them. Without a word, without even a goodbye, he up and left his Lost Boys, choosing to do the one thing he’d always vowed not to do: grow up. In a way you almost see Pan-Steve’s betrayal as more damning than Wendy’s. Wendy told Pan she wanted to grow up. He didn’t give that same consideration to his Lost Boys, and in fact not only left them without his presence and leadership, but he also kept Tink with him as well which is a double betrayal on the part of Pan in Bucky’s mind.

I like how here you have Pan-Steve remember who Bucky is and even address him here: (("Bucky?")) but how Bucky replies (("Who are you?")). It works to show just how much that Pan has changed in the time that he’s been away from Neverland that Bucky cannot instantly recognize him.

I think that having Pan recognize in this section: ((Bucky studied him like a wolf examining prey. The expression frightened him and confused him slightly. If it hadn't been for the fact Bucky's left eye still retained the red star painted around the black, the boy would have been a stranger.)) how much that Pan didn’t realize that Bucky was a dangerous and formidable Lost Boy. This animalistic side was always there but he didn’t see it then because he was far too busy having fun. Now that he’s no longer Pan, now that he’s living in the mortal realm, he can see those things he hadn’t been able to see before and recognizes that Bucky is not the Bucky he completely thought he was.

((...he shut and locked the window, vowing never to open it again.))—this line is so finite and spells out so clearly how the innocence of childhood has been lost and will never again be reclaimed.

In all this was a great chapter that explores the lines of friendship and shows what friendship has cost Pan, and what it has cost to those who once meant everything to him. Fantabulous job!

Hi there! Been a while since I last read this story! Can’t believe I never finished it :/

This chapter is rather bittersweet because it shows what a struggle it is to actually grow up. Pan-Steve is still very much against growing up, that is evident in the way that he speaks with Wendy and lets her see how much he abhors the fact that she’s grown up. However, growing up allows him to be with Peggy (even if it might only be for a short time). The price though is that he has to give up Neverland and his Lost Boys. He wonders if he’s able to do that, if he can just walk away from the life he’s known for so long.

What I like about this section of dialogue here: (("Hello, boy.")) is that it tells us who this is without fussing about the details. I’m instantly brought back into the story and remember the sequence of events that have led up to this point without having to backtrack in order to catch myself up. This is Wendy/Peggy, the girl/woman that Pan/Steve loves and whom he cut himself off of because she wanted to grow up and he wasn’t ready to grow up.

((How could Wendy have abandoned him?))—This line so perfectly epitomizes how Pan-Steve feels. Growing up is tantamount to betrayal in his mind. That Wendy dared choose to grow up says she chose to forsake him and everything that their friendship once stood for.

((Then why do you keep the window open? You clearly can't come to Neverland anymore."))—the bitterness in his words here just screams off the page. It’s such a great line to tell us that Pan-Steve doesn’t like being in the mortal world but that he recognizes that he can no longer bring Wendy-Peggy back to his world for a few stolen hours. She’s no longer able to fly because she’s passed off childhood for adulthood and forgotten the wonder and innocence necessary to travel between the two realms. And it’s something that leaves a bitter taste in the mouth of Pan-Steve who hasn’t yet reached the decision to pass those things off and remain in the mortal realm with her.

The confliction here: ((If he stayed for her, could he remain near Wendy forever?)) in this line just says that while Pan is not ready to grow up, while he fears growing up, that there is a part of him that does want to do so if only because it allows him to be near the only person who has ever really made him feel something other than loyalty or friendship or brotherhood. So when he says: (( "Wendy, I want to grow up.")) it is not a big shock. You expect that this is the natural course of things. Yet he does doubt his ability to walk away. We see him internally struggle and wonder if he can leave the Lost Boys and Neverland. At first it seems that he will refuse, that he will return home, but then he sees Moira and he chooses to give up being Pan, to give up his Lost Boys and Neverland in order to remain with Wendy and her granddaughter.

In all, this was an excellent chapter that showed us what it took to make the boy who vowed to never grow up to do just that. Fantabulous job!

Hi there!

Wow, what a somber chapter you've written here. So, I'm guessing Peter really is Steve in this fic? Or is he like a mirror version of what Steve goes through in real life. There are a lot of mysteries in this fic that has me wondering and questioning what the next chapter will bring about - like what is Wendy's real name? How are the characters all connected and how will you bring the story to a close?

He couldn't entirely understand why some buildings were gone and others licked with black soot. Had a fire ravaged the city? He hadn't been gone that long, had he? - I don't remember the canon year that Peter Pan first showed up, but I like how you used this to show us how different the world had been since he last came so we could guess it'd been possibly a few months or years since he last came.

She ran a hand through her red hair before crossing her arms again. "She's just going to grow up and leave you heartbroken." - It's a sad thought that Tinkerbell pronounced to him, but honestly, there may be a ring of truth in her statement. I feel like Peter feels like staying a child will keep the hurt at bay and if he keeps seeing her, he could pretend like nothing's ever changed.

Heartbroken? What did that mean? - In it's own way, this is a heartbreaking line... especially in literature because when it happens, and we know it will, he will learn the hard way.

Wendy entered and quickly shut the door behind her. "Peter, what are you doing here?" - I like this line. It really shows the first evidence of change from Wendy even if it isn't picked up on by Peter.

There was no one nor any place on Neverland that caused his heart to flutter like she did. It was confusing, and yet exciting all at once. It took him a moment to find his voice as he could only stare at her. She was still beautiful, despite the fact she looked a tad bit older. - Oh how I love this paragraph especially the part highlighted in the review. It's funny because when I look at it, Peter doesn't realize that meeting Wendy had made him grow up in a way even if he hadn't noticed. The way that he looks at her, only being able to stare, feeling that she's beautiful despite being older, he's in love or some variation of the emotion. I like that you mention "no one nor any place in Netherland" caused his heart to flutter like she did. Wonderfully showing statements.

Her frown faded and a partial smile took its place. "How many times do I have to remind you, my name's not really Wendy?" - Second evidence of the change in Wendy and the possibility that Tink may end up being right about his relationship with "Wendy."

"She says she's sorry for what happened. And for the way she's treated you in the past. She hopes you'll forgive her." - Aww... how sweet.

Without any goading from him, Tink sprinkled Wendy with fairy dust; apparently eager to take the girl away from painful memories. - I love how somber and sweet this ending is. It lightens it up and adds a hope to this but also a reality that nothing simple could take away the hurt and pain Wendy had gone through with the World War. I am excited to see where you'll go with this story.

Keep writing,
Until Next Time,
Neo

Hello! Back again for more fantasy fun! I love the way that in this chapter that you build up the potential ‘love affair’ between Pan and Wendy, but then have him them separated by this great chasm called ‘growing up.’ I find that it lends more to the credibility of the relationship and makes it standout that they are not perfect characters and that theirs is not a perfect fairytale romance. I also think having Tink take home Wendy rather than himself works to showcase the immaturity of Pan as well as his latent fears about giving up Wendy, Neverland, his Lost Boys, his childhood. Growing up means responsibility and doing grownup things. While Pan clearly enjoys the little nuances and slow changes happening between him and Wendy, he’s not ready for the responsibility of a mature relationship.

Here: ((She flew into him and he was all too happy to catch her.)) is where the sweetness and innocence and of their relationship first gets glimpsed. They are ‘happy’ to be together, and everything is as it always is between them. They are young, free, able to enjoy in the simplicity and beauty enveloping them.

I thought this: ((He rose slightly off the ground, chest tightening in a way he'd never felt before. For a moment, he thought a boa constrictor was curling around him.)) really worked to showcase that burgeoning cusp of manhood. Pan is definitely on the fringe between that area where he’s still a boy who wants to have a fun, and a man who is discovering desire and an interest in girls as something other than storytellers.

Wendy’s observation in this line: (("There's something in you that seems different. You're not as cocky nor arrogant.")) again foreshadows how Pan is on that cusp between manhood and boyhood. He’s maturing

This: ((Sorrow washed across her features. Even with the full light of the moon, it seemed as if the world had gone dark without her smile.)) is just a beautiful work of imagery. I can see it in that Disney type of way where the world goes dark when the heroine has had some calamity befall her, she’s argued with the hero, or the villain has come to call. It really works to showcase how the light and innocence is leaving the world after the argument with Pan about growing up. It shows for me how engrained the two are, and how without Wendy, Pan cannot see the beauty of the world that is around him.

Having Pan basically acknowledge how: ((Even Tiger Lily didn't hold a candle to his Wendy.)) really works to showcase the importance that Wendy has in his life. He’s cast off the Indian Princess he once favored for Wendy shows how special she has become to him. Everybody has one special love in this life, and this is Pan’s, clearly. She’s his light, his heart, and his happiness.

This: ((Her brow wrinkled as she sat up. "It's Peggy. My real name is Peggy.")) brings reality into the mix. She’s not Wendy. She’s just the Wendy that Pan has so-named as such. She’s a real girl, from a real world who is stealing moments out of her drudgery by visiting a place of whim and fancy. However, she’s still a real girl and she has a real name. Something she tries to explain to Pan, but which only makes the problems between them gap wider.

Pan just tearing the hell out of there here: ((He bolted into the dark clouds as rain began to drizzle, masking all signs of his tears.)) just takes us back to how much he’s still a boy inside a man’s developing body. He’s not capable of conflict resolution at this point and so runs away from it, choosing to push Wendy away and out of his life rather than to deal with her proclamations about wanting and needing to grow up. I also think having the weather change to signify the emotions that are running rampant between the two really show just how tied that Pan is to Neverland. His light is leaving him and it is tearing him in two. His emotional state is effectively the world, causing it to cry the tears that he himself cannot bring himself to cry.

In all, this was another fabulous chapter that started on a sweet note and ended on a sad one.
Absolutely fantastic job!

I find it pretty cool that the first part of this chapter and the first part of the second chapter focus on the effects of war on the house (or in this chapter, around the house).

I really like that Tink talks in this chapter since this is his perspective he can understand her jingling. I also like Tink primping a little, whether consciously or not. Red hair? Is this the Tinker Bell from Hook then? I like that little twist.

I like how he doesn’t know what Germany is but he can understand war. It’s also indicative of his character that while she reacts sadly to war he doesn’t. I think if I remember correctly his memory is a bit off in the actual story so I wonder if maybe he just forgets the people who die and that is why war and death in Neverland never manage to mature him in any way.

I find it interesting that her name isn’t Wendy. It makes me honestly think that this is Wendy’s daughter or granddaughter and that Peter has just been unable to comprehend that Wendy died (or it’s been so long since he visited that he missed it entirely). But Tink’s comment about him visiting so often makes me think not. On that same vein, I wonder if Tink is trying to save Wendy from painful memories or rather save Peter from painful memories.

I’m very intrigued to find out what is going on. Good chapter!

YOU MADE CAPTAIN AMERICA BE PETER PAN? WHAT? *mind blown* I thought he was going to be just some Lost Boy for a second but go big or go home.

I actually hate Peter Pan but love Captain America (at least from the movies), so I’m excited to see how this works out. I always felt Peter was a sociopath but if he evolves into Captain America… hmm. That’s some amazing character development, that’s for sure.

I don’t get why her name wasn’t Wendy when they met… I’m a tad bit confused on that point.

I kind of wish that you had given us more of his perspective in this intro. We all know this story of how Wendy met Peter from Wendy’s perspective, but this is Peter’s perspective. We do get a few quick quirks but at the beginning it wasn’t as strong. I’d be interested to have seen a bit more buildup such as why was he on Earth on this trip. Of course that’s a personal preference. I understand that since it is a flashback of Wendy he would naturally jump straight ahead to the moment he met her. I don’t know, I just feel the end of the flashback is more in his voice than the beginning.

I love you!

Caught a couple of minor grammatical things right away: the semicolon in the first sentence should be a comma, and a bit later, you say 'had last' when it should be 'had lasted.' This might be partly because I'm fandom-blind, but I feel like those first couple paragraphs could also do with some extra expositional information - how did the room change his life? What was he doing when he was away? (You could probably just swap out where you say 'after a long absence' for 'after whatever-he-was-doing' for a quick fix.) etc etc

'If every child knew the possibilities that existed in the world' - I really like (what I'm assuming is!) your subtle nod to Neverland here, and if it wasn't intentional, well, kudos all the more. XD

'no matter how long he was forced to live' - Either I'm missing something because I'm fandom-blind or you're foreshadowing something you're going to explain later, idk which, but either way, your wording here is really intriguing.

"he'd first laid" I'm /pretty/ sure should be "lain." Like ninety percent sure. God knows, though. baha

I really enjoyed your retelling of the shadow scene in the next scene - I'm lost as hell because I don't know the fandom so I've got no idea how this is supposed to tie in with Captain America, but either way, I like it, haha. I love both characters' dialogue here - they both came across as really charming and distinctive - and the whole paragraph where he's reflecting that Neverland isn't a joke was just lovely.

Hello there! Been meaning to read more of this fantastic story :)

I think what I love so much about this story is that it so perfectly reflects the aspects of Steve’s character. He’s someone that I see as being very sweetly naïve to some regards, a bit of a dreamer, someone who still believes that fairy tales exist. He’s an opposite of Tony in a lot of ways because I see Tony as a realist that looks at the mechanics of the world and has given up something like dreaming simply because he’s had his dreams get destroyed once too often. Tony and Steve tend to balance each other out for that reason and it’s what makes (for me) their friendship such a great one. Tony knows that the modern world is one which almost more dangerous than the one that Steve ‘died’ trying to protect. But Steve still sees it as a world worth saving.

This: ((The boy shrugged and one of his fox ears fell back.)) for me was just an adorable little rendering of Lost Boy Tony. Just makes the heart melt because it’s one of those cute images where you see this little dark haired boy with a smirk on his face and just want to hug him for being so adorable.

The dialogue here: (("Be like what? Abandoned by the Great Pan?"/"You're my best friend, Bucky. You know that. And Wendy being around—")) between Bucky and Pan/Steve is just great. It shows their friendship, but it also shows the point of contention that does tend to crop up when we reach adolescence: significant others. One party getting a girl/boyfriend while another party doesn’t have one has been the cause of many a friendship turning sour. People feel they are being abandoned, that they are no longer as important, that the person doesn’t want them round.

Love this line: ((Bucky barked a laugh. "Peter Pan wouldn't let a girl change him.")). It’s so teenager-y. And such a boy line in a way. Girls are still a mystery to Bucky and it’s clear he doesn’t see how one could have the power to change his best bud from the Pan he is. Boy has he got a lot to learn :p

Wonderful bridge between Steve and Pan here: ((Love. Did any of them know what that meant? Regardless of the fact Wendy caused his heart to fly higher than a Never Bird, he wouldn't leave his Lost Boys. He cared for them far too much.)). Again, it’s so much of the youth factor, that not knowing about love, not really understanding it for what it is. I think it also works to describe Steve. In Captain America: The First Avenger, we see Steve and Peggy on the cusp of that tumble into this slippery world of love. It’s still fresh, it’s still new and it’s not something which Steve has experienced before because he was the guy most girls wouldn’t look twice at because he wasn’t stacked, packed and notice worthy (pft). Does it mean he was going to leave his friends and partners behind? Hell no. That’s not Captain America’s style, nor is it Steve’s way. Will he move on and find some life and happiness for himself? Sure. But he won’t forget his friends. Here, you showcase that by showing how Pan doesn’t see himself doing that because he cares for his Lost Boys far too much.

The end line: (("I'm with you til the end of line.")) is so prophetic. It's like Bucky is foreshadowing how there's a point where Pan will leave, where he will choose Wendy-Peggy over Neverland and his Lost Boys. And it's like he's telling Pan that he'll remain his friend still and wait for him, no matter what. That even at the end, he'll still have his back. It's so poetic and beautiful that it brings a tear to the eye. Great way to close the chapter :)

In all this was a brilliant little chapter and I can’t wait to read more. Great job!

Sorry for the wait.

I kept telling myself that I’ll review you today. Thank you for the review you gave me yesterday, btw. It really made my day.

Your opening scene is so intriguing. And I love your language in describing the emotions and tone set in the piece. I don’t know much about the Captain America canon outside of the first movie and the Avengers, and though I’ve never been a huge fan of him, your writing interests me in him.

Leaning against the bed post, the smell of furniture varnish reached his nose and comforted him. - This line and the one prior has this nostalgic feeling when I read it, and I feel a certain connection with him and the smells and so forth.

Slight nitpick: I believe “bed post” should be one word.

This room had always been there for him, and he never expected how it could have changed his life. - Nice. It’s funny how certain things could mean so much. lol. I like how he personified the room as always “being there for him.”

The last part of the line: he never expected how it could have changed his life, is a bit awkwardly worded. It’s also a bit wordy.

I’m not sure on the exact meaning of the context of the sentence so I can’t give you a real example but I’ll try, maybe you could say: “he never expected for the room to be the cause of so much change in his life.

Gently, he brushed his fingers over the wood, comforting it. - I really love the term “comforting it,” the wording really describes how Steve is with the wood. He’s gentle and maybe a bit firm, but I love that phrase. I would have never been so awesome to think of that phrase in describing someone brushing their fingers over anything.

His shoulders slumped slightly as a smile lined his lips. - Again, your visual descriptions are so well-written. I can easily imagine him, standing there and about to laugh, his strong shoulders jutted forward as he stares he pictures on the wall of little fairy tales and knowing now, as a grown man, most of those were quite possibly true.

every child knew the possibilities that existed in the world, perhaps it would be a better place with more laughter and less tears. - What a wonderful use of characterization. He’s a war veteran but is also a believer in peace, and he’s constantly suffering from doubt if the world will ever be better. I think it was a perfect characterization of him.

Even after all was said and done, she was still changing him. - I love the entire paragraph about the little girl. It’s powerfully written. I absolutely love it, and I love how this little girl is written and described... how his attachment is palpable in your writing.

It makes me curious to find out who she is.

Second star to the right, straight on til morning." - Dunno why this makes me wanna sing the song “second star to the right.” lol... Anyways, I like the girl’s confusion at his words. I’ve never read Peter Pan, but I’ve seen the cartoon movie and the live-action long ago...

Brown hair was curled around her curious face - your description here is so wonderful. I freaking love it. Very easy to see and simple enough that I can fill in the rest of the details.

"I would have thought it was fairly obvious." His hands curled into little balls and he placed them on his waist. - I’m trying to remember if this was in the Peter Pan canon, but his actions are freaking adorable. lol.

The second scene was extremely interesting, the inclusion of Peter Pan into the story. It made me think for a few moments of why you did that... and I can see how Steve can definitely be compared to Peter because his meeting with Wendy would forever change him even if he would stay forever young... and in the same way, the girl from prior to the present day... she’s is Captain’s Wendy.

I really think you did an amazing job on this fanfic. I really loved it. There was so much to Captain, and you brought out what makes him a wonderful character out so well.

Your skills are fantastic, and that makes all Neos happy. lol. Happy!Neo is a RTer at this point.

Until Next Time,
Neo