Must have more asap. Love it so far, keep it up. Can't wait to see what happens next.

i wish someone would flame this story! cause if they do I WILL CUSS THEM OUT MYSELF! this is the most hottest story i have ever read! and it is written well... any questions? LOL! much love darling!

aww. sweet. more pleeeease. I'll be waiting.

update please, this story is really good, i will wait for the net chapters!

update soon please, i really liked it ;)

love it. please update soon

Not bad, but certainly could be better. I'd suggest you reread your story and check for grammatical and spelling errors before you post, especially the verb tense. As of now, your narration keep being switched around between present tense and past tense. There are also quite a few missing words and misspelling of some homophone i.e. their/there/they're.
It'd also add to the story if you'd just give more detailed description on each scene such as what the characters were thinking/feeling, how did they look, why they acted in certain ways, etc.

O.o Wow! Awesome chapter filled with heat and lemon. Enjoy your trip.

I enjoyed the heat and drama of the first chapter. Loved the jealousy from Renji in the second. Looking forward to the other 9 chapters.

Good work so far. I hope you continue it.

Please, if possible, in a romance story, try to specify only the two main characters instead of four, FF filters are not perfect.

I like it. Please continue.