Wonderfully done.

Difficult subject matter that you handled very well. I particularly like the punishment that was dealt to those who needed it. It got the job done without added violence. A special thanks for adding a smudge of romance at then end, after allowing time to pass.

This was a really good read. I especially was caught within the part which Jareth's aftermath to the Viewing: it really is as if it had happened to him and I truly found amazing how you managed to bring that out. Great work !

Hard to read in places due to the subject matter, but well done for persisting with it. I loved his final line to her : )

I know I was going to read Vahan and review it for you, but I decided to read everything you've posted :3 I loved how this one turned out and how you integrated your own things into the actual story line that the movie follows. The only thing that I think could have done with some extra work was the beginning. It seemed to be just a little rushed in the beginning but then it smoothed out and flowed beautifully

I can honestly say I was hesitant to read this one, but I loved it! Well parts of it and the idea behind it, not so much the . . . rape. I can honestly say that sickened me and I skipped the memories. Anyway, it was great! Loved the ending!

This is very well done, I am so glad that they got a happy ending. Interesting to have a dark fic where Jareth is the good guy. Thank you for this.

For personal reasons this one tied me up in knots. You handled it well. The story is flowing and honest if that makes sense. Good job.

I am internally screaming at how epic this is! Well done! Jareth and Sarah are one of my favorite hetero pairings and omg you did them so beautifully! I'm about to ravenously devour your other works -twirls away-

A very sad and dark time for Sarah..it just makes me mad and so sad that the ones who should protect and defend children are the ones who sometimes abuse them. I am so glad she had a friend like Jareth and that he pushed her enough so that he could help her. I'm glad her father got life in prison instead of death...he deserved to suffer for a long while. So glad she got her happy ending. :) Thanks for sharing. xo

Although very dark and uncomfortable subject matter the the bad made to good all the better...

Love that Jareth helped her heal & waited for her to come to him; so glad they both got their "happily ever after"

Wow... intense! My favorite part was the letters and their reactions; the subtle exploration and doubt. Sadly, it's been so long since I saw Labyrinth, that I've forgotten some of the details - the peach reference went straight over my head. Until Sarah made her comment, I didn't even realize I'd forgotten something.

After that, it was still well written and carried your story very well, but since you said you wanted critique from other writers, I thought I would share - you appear to have fallen into the same trap I did when writing about something I hadn't experienced. One of my stories has a character now living in a safe place, but I insinuate strongly she has been sexually abused. I tried to imagine her reactions based on that background, but I had a reviewer who HAD undergone such abuse, write and tell me I had it ALL wrong. I've rewritten and reposted based on some personal PMs that followed, but, sadly, I've lost touch with that reviewer so not only have I not been told if the rewrites are sufficiently altered toward reality, but I've lost their input as that character was preparing to make a significant spiritual decision. Story kinda stalled there and I haven't found another 'guide' yet. May have to finish without, cuz I want to finish, but I really want the finished story to be 'real' to every reader, not just the the blessedly ignorant ones. The lesson I learned is that if I haven't personally experienced it, I had probably better research it (if possible), especially things involving the human psyche.

That said, I'm the last person to comment on grammar - lol, but I commend you for a lack of misspelled words or distracting homonyms *GRIN*. I also want to note you have a very descriptive way of writing. I love the parlay of words and the nuances in emotional expression you take the characters through. I could really feel the tension and Sarah's emotion at the picnic - I actually hurt for her, and - finally - I LOVE the end. Even if it might not have realistically come about in just that fashion, I could see it coming to this end quite naturally. It all makes we want to go watch the movie again ;)

LMAO! loved how you ended that! :) Beautiful and just wish there was more. lol

Wow... Loved it! And that ending was fabulous. Nicely done!