Absolutly love this story I mean I haven't read any story where God of War was separated from the Major but damn that was neat as hell and the ending was amazing truly a HEA

This is more telling than the Bible. Showing is an art form. Try it some time. Please.

The switches in tense give me horrible whiplash. . I wish this went through a beta. Would’ve been interested in reading through

Wow...what is your obsession with rape? It's pretty morbid! Lol

Am I The Only One Trying To Figure Out What Happened To The Baby That Lillian Gave to Rose And Emmett? Like you Just Threw That In There And Then She Completely Disappears

That wasn't bad. Over very nice with a touch of depressive drama.

is alice going to mate with charlie when he wakes?

who is edward's mate, mike or angela?

Bella's insecurities were driving me up the walls in the begining of this chapter. I felt like slapping her and telling her to finally start to use her brain. And I can't help but think that she obviously doesn't trust Jasper, doesn't believe what he says therefore maybe, just maybe he would've been better off without her. And why was Jasper apologizing? She should be the one to apologise for not trusting his words.
As to the rape scene. It was difficult for me to read for personal reasons. I had to kind of fast forward. No one that was even close to such an experience themselves would ever use rape as lightly as FF authors tend to do. Rape is not something that you can truly get over and have your HEA afterwards. It kills a part of you and I'm really sorry that you decided to join other authors in recklessly using rape as a source of fictional entertainment. Especially since this whole thing was illogical. Bella was supposed to be protected because of the threat of Maria. Peter should be able to know that there were trouble ahead. Alice should be able to see what happens Those guys were supposedly afraid of Bella finding out since her dad was a cop. It just doesn't make any sense and I can't help but feel that it was nothing but a thoughtless, cheap angst. I don't think I can continue reading this story. Sorry.

Whaaat? You cut the chapter at Jasper's confession and then you jump several weeks forward? Whyyyyy? I'm pretty sure I'm not the only one that wanted to see the rest of the conversation not to mention the days following.
I should probably add that I do enjoy reading the story. I know I have a tendency to only comment about what's bothering me and not about what I like. So there. I do like it. Especially the getting impure part...
Oh and there's one thing that you should fix. In one of the chapter s Bella is thinking about Edward and how she wants to hook him up with Lillian. And in the next one she's thinking about being ready to give him herself. I guess she was thinking about Jasper. However since she was last referring to Edward, the 'he' in the sentence had me freeze for a second before I cought up to the meaning.

Ooook, so one, Jasper told Emmett and Rose about Bella so that they could ensure that no male was touching her because that would make Jasper go berserk since he hadn't claimed her. And what does Emmett do? He keeps touching her by giving her hugs. I get that their hugs became sort of a cannon but in your story it makes me wonder: is Emmett really childlike or rather is he retarded?
Two-i didn't like the angst when Alice convinced Bella that Jasper was her mate. It was cliche and unnecessary.
Three- Peter gift is kinda BS in your story, it doesn't seem to work when it's really needed

I don't get it. Why is Jasper keeping the fact that they're mates a secret? It makes no sense. First of all if Bella was convinced that he had followed the mating pull to some female vampire ,she could very well fight her feelings to him. And two she already fell in love with him which he must know since he's an empath so it's pointless to lie to her

I liked the beginning of the story. It's original. The only thing that really bothers me is that you keep switching between past and present tense.

Ok, I know that the kids were evil but what was done to them was on the disturbing side :(

This is a very interesting take in the cannon. You have me hooked and I can't wait to see what happens next.