Well... that was... dark. And really, amazingly well-written. It scared me and gave me all sorts of goosebumps- well done! And poor, poor, poor Remus...

Honestly, you could have made it more creepy. The big thing is that is Remus is bleeding out then how would he have the concentration to draw? I was expecting the last line or something to be how when Madam Pomfret arrived she saw no pictures, only the puddles of blood that trickled from the blood on his fingers as he wheezed in another breath. I want to see him dying!

I have no words :(
G-great!

Wow, this is very creepy, but in a good way! Not in the way that makes me think you're a scary person, in a way that portrays the chaos and numbing terror of Remus' situation really well.

This is the most beautifully horrific thing I've ever read. I like how Remus focused on specific things that he drew, and how dark and creepy that he drew with his own blood. I'm more caught up on what Madame Pomfrey's reaction will be, honestly. I can't even imagine... :P Anywayyy, I like the paragraph on what everyone is doing after the prank Sirius pulled, and the way you describe Sirius breaks me into pieces. Oooh, and I particularly like Lily [not knowing enough]. I love the end - it gets even more creepy when Remus wishes Pomfrey could see the pictures but knows she'll just be screaming, and doesn't even care that he starts to bleed because it's just more ink to draw with. This was lovelylovelylovely.

Oh this is wonderful! In a creepy and dark kind of way. To be honest, I love it. I can see him doing just this, drawing with his blood, and I imagine that no one washes them away, so he sees them every time he visits. And then when he comes back in the third Harry Potter book, he sees some of them revealed under the dustless spots. Bravo! I love this. It hooked me, and is a great read.

I knew from the summary that I was going to love this. And I was right. (and gosh, it's given me a terrible urge to go do some painting...)

I thought that the details about the drawings, and the features of each person and image Remus drew were particularly excellent. Like, gah, I loved the way you chose specific features for him to focus on, like Sirius's aristocratic nose, or his father's line forehead. Yes yes yes.

My one criticism is that I really wish you had clarified how the injury had happened within the story - perhaps in a brief paragraph or even just another line or two with Sirius? - rather than telling us in an author's note.

...Oh wow, this is BRILLIANT. I suppose it is creepy, but it's gorgeous in its own way, all the same. I love Remus drawing like that, the way he draws everyone and everything, and it's such a shame that he's using his own blood to do so...Madam Pomfrey really should have arrived sooner. O.o I love this all so much, and the end, it's just...I love the "adding a little more beauty to a harsh and ugly world," you wouldn't think of drawing with your own blood as adding beauty, but it is. I love it.

Yes, it was creepy, but I absolutely loved it. It was beautiful in a horrifying sort of way and it was so interesting to read. I loved that Sirius' was the first face he drew; it makes what he did seem even worse to me. And I really liked that you wrote about a hobby that wasn't reading or doing homework.

I've never actually read this scene from Remus' point of view before, and I actually loved that this was all set before he could remember what had happened. And I really loved that you showed what the Marauders were doing while Remus was lying there, bleeding.

Yes, it was horrendously creepy. Like, that was insane. Fantastic job here. I love Remus's characterization, and the connection to his hobby, the story, and the blood. I love how the only color mentioned was red, and I love the connection to the most horrible full moon accident, and your characters of Lily, James, Sirius, Pomfrey, the list goes on.
Wow. Just, wow.

This is creepy but interesting. Remus is a character that doesn't always get fleshed out enough sometimes so I like that he has other things he enjoys besides reading or studying or being Maraudery. This is also really cool because you wrote what happened the night he almost killed Snape from his perspective... before he realizes what actually happened. That's definitely a different take on that scene so well done there.
The bit with the blood is also very creepy, but it definitely paints a memorable visual. Remus having a preoccupation with blood, especially in his feverish not-quite-a-werewolf state, is believable. Great job!

I really don't think that it's too creepy - you did a good job on describing the redness of the paintings, and the blood metaphor, without being overly graphic. To me, at least.
I didn't find any SPaG or flow errors, but I did find a few things that seemed strange, such as when you said that Sirius was curled up in Dumbledore's office, as this makes me picture sleeping or lying down.
Good job!
- Deb.

I have to say that this was rather interesting (albeit.. it was kind of morbidly bewitching... if that makes any sense at all). There were some poetic nuances here and there that really helped to tie in the overlying sadness. Given the prompts and such, it was quite creative. I liked how you added little scenes of other characters instead of just focussing the whole story on Remus. Nice opening... and nice closing... lots of good substance. There was a certain intense feeling that kept coming up throughout the whole story, which made it slightly enigmatic and subliminally haunting, especially the very ending. Great job!

This was so horrific but wonderful at the same time.
The way you use blood as a metaphor for ink is both great and disturbing. This was so well-written and tasteful for a sensitive topic, and I like how you were able to get your message across without being too graphic.
I find your writing borders on poetic, and it really is beautiful. This is chilling, and lovely and I adore the way you concluded it, how he keeps going.
Good job!

Flutterby! The concept is creepy and dark but you wrote it in a positive-ish way, so I wasn't terribly creeped out by this one-shot. I've never read about an artistic Remus before but it does seem to work well with his introspective personality. I like how you expound on the relationship he has with Sirius even though Sirius isn't physically there in the Shack with him. The details and internal struggle in this one were marvelously done.

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