awww cute! so cute! so cute! EEEEEEEEEEEEE! they kissed! yes! they kissed! i want more kissing sceans its just too cute!

Very cute story. I really like it and I do hope that you continue it with some other ideas. :)

Hmmm...maybe the readers could send you ideas to help continue?

I don't want to sound blunt, but already, your story is quite flawed. I'm might not even bother reading on, but what you do need to know is how to pace the story and how to develop good, wholesome characters.
For one /oh my god/ Mia is a mute. Now, there doesn't seem to be any problem with this but the reason she doesn't speak is pretty much pathetic. I'm pretty sure /nobody/ suddenly spills out their whole tragic sob story to somebody they just met. Nobody. And the horrible, nasty things Mia's father's friend did? Sounds like Mia's a *drumroll, please* Pity Sue! Please, if you don't know what this means, look it up. I also suggest looking for blogs that teach you how to create decent, un-MarySueish characters.
The protective and caring "brother" friend is also a rather over used concept.
So far, your plot isn't very good either. Seriously? Mute girl is /amazing/ at music, stumbles across host club and then gets her best brother/friend to tell them about her abusive past. Host club pities her and after Tamaki hears mute girl play, he immediately says that she's amazing and hires her as club musician. Basically it's pretty weak.
I realise that this review sounds very harsh but consider it as constructive criticism. Your idea of a mute girl befriending the club and possibly falling in love with a member shows some promise and deserves merit, but I really do suggest you look into the development of character more.
Yes, this review is very unfair as I have only read two chapters, but I'm going to try to finish reading this and if there are still some points you should probably work on, I might leave another review. Might being the operative word.
I hope you have a thick enough skin to not be offended by all of this and instead continue to work on your story. Really, I'm not trying to discourage you, in fact, this could probably be considered encouragement, in some weird twisted way.
Cheers,
Quirky Sadist.

Damn... That was some plot twist...

Lolz, tamaki is a pervert! Hahaha!

Awwww, Yuzuru is warming up! X3

I like this but what's dreamland? I've been wondering about it

Aww, cute! Fangirl scream! Tamiki and mia kiss!

Niice! :D

Please finish this!

Haruhi is Tamaki's Mia is one of the twins pleeeeeeeaaaassseeee

I love it please post soon.

Poor Mia! XD Lts hope she doesn't get sick from the seafood either!

Love the story!