Writers Note: This was an idea I had a while back, what if characters could read the FanFiction stories? How would they react? I have decided to try out my experimental idea with one of my own stories so as not to insult anyone. I will not have a character review a particular story without the author's permission and I will always credit the autor and advise you read the story before reading the review. If you have a particular character or story you would like reviewed, let me know via reviews or private message. While I understand that I am crediting myself below, this should serve as a decent example of how I will credit any author who allows me to add their stories to this.

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Story: Bella's Power /8671273/

Chapter: 1 Proposal - Bella /1/

Author: SophieAngel69 /4330601/

Reviewer: Bella Cullen

This story was written and created by SophieAngel69 as a twilight FanFiction. The original characters belong to Stephenie Myer, and the story contained herein belongs to SophieAngel69. It is advised that you read the original story.

Bella's POV

"Look Edward, you're the one who's always talking about human experiences. Well this is something I want to experience. While I'm still human." He opened his mouth a few times to speak but just closed it again to continue thinking.

Finlay a grin spread across his face. "Okay," he said, "On our wedding night." Oh I remember that. Edward was being his stupid over-cautious self. I recall I really hated it at the time.

"What? But..." I stumbled over my words realising just how long I would have to wait for him.

"Do we have a deal?" Edward asked me, ignoring my helpless look.

I looked away disappointed. "Fine." I grumbled at him.

His smile broadened. "So that's a yes?" He asked me expectantly.

Sensing it was my best option I replied saying, "Yes, that's a yes. But don't expect me to make it easy for you." Did I really say that last part?

He smiled again and my annoyance faded when he leaned in for a kiss, but just before our lips met he pulled away. "Wait," he cautioned. I want to do this right." He immediately stood up and walked around the bed to the opposite side of the room and opened a draw.

I groaned and fell backwards on te bed.

"Bella," Edward chuckled grabbing my arm and pulling me across the bed to stand on the floor facing him.

As he got down on one knee and gave his little speech my breath caught. I already knew my response but when he asked me properly I couldn't help but realise how much of a romantic he truly was.

"Yes." I somehow managed to say as he stood up placing the ring on my finger and kissing me.

The kiss began chastely and I eagerly deepened it. "Bella," he cautioned pulling away after a few moments. "I can't-" He began but stopped when I groaned loudly in annoyance and slipped out of his arms to throw myself down on the bed.

"Yeah yeah I get it. You don't want to hurt me." I waved him off. I knew I was being insufferable but I was desperate, I needed him NOW! A sudden idea struck me, I knew it was mean but, like I said, I was desperate. Okay I don't recall being that annoyed at thetime.And besides, why did Edward get to call all the shots? How come he had all the power? That is a good point. How come I didn't get any say in the matter. Surely I had some power in this relationship too. I wasn't even sure if I could do it or not, but my body seemed to have no problem with the idea. "Edward you are being awfully mean." I pouted at him. "I don't know how it works for vampires, but as a human, I have needs. And it is rude of you to neglect them" I informed pretending to be upset. Okay I know my husband, and that would never work.

"You don't understand how dangerous it is Bella, I could hurt you, or kill you, or... What are you doing?" He asked staring ar my fingers tracing my lips.

"Well just because you neglect my needs doesn't mean I'm going to neglect them." I grinned raking his body with my eyes and imagining him walking towards me, pressing his lips against my own, sliding his tongue gently into my mouth. I slipped my fingers inside my mouth momentarily to enhance my fantasy. I opened my eyes to view him again. Edward watched wide-eyed and in shock as I removed my fingers from my mouth and trailed them down my neck, chest, over my breast. Edward watched as I cupped my breast briefly before trailing my fingers over the nipple. He's not the only one wide-eyed. I would never have had confidence like that back then.

"Bella," he seemed to have remembered how to speak.

I could feel my face heating up from embarrassment but having Edward at my mercy like this was not an oportunity I was willing to pass up. "Stand over there." I ordered pointing to the wall opposite the bed.

"Why?" He asked cautiously doing as I said.

"So I can get a better look at you." I said sizing him up and leaning back to get comfortable. "Feel free to take off as much as you like." I invited him running my right hand under my shirt and across my stomach before bringing it up to cup my breast underneath my bra. I could feel my body heat up at my touch as I imagined it was his.

"Bella..." He began.

Did he know how to say anything besides my name? Awestruck Edward, I like that, he is always in control of the situation. It might be fun to be the one with the power for once. This overly assertive me is not all bad. "Yes Edward?" I replied pulling off my shirt altogether. He paused as I brought my left hand across to my breasts and my right ventured down to my jeans. It did feel rather good to be touched like that, even if it was only by me, but it was embarrassing none the less because Edward could see me. If he were to participate I would have to problem with that, but him watching was both a little off-putting and arousing at the same time. But I enjoyed that I had him near speechless, I could now clearly see what little power I had in this relationship. And maybe it wasn't quite so little. That wouldn't work on the real Edward, would it?

"Uh..." He watched me open the button on my jeans far to slowly. "What are you doing?"

"It's all quite simple Edward, you and I are going to satisfy my needs." I smiled at him as my hand made its way to the zipper of my jeans. Why am I starting to breathe more heavily?

"Bella," there he goes again. My breath was beginning to speed up. "I can't... I can't touch you"

"But you're not touching me," I reminded him. "You are standing there looking like a god as always, while I watch you." My hand slowly slipped inside my pants. "And I would happily help you satisfy your needs if you ever so much as ask." I gently ran my fingers over my underwear and let out a small moan. "And like I said, feel free to remove whatever clothing you like, or better yet deal with that." I gestured to the tent in his pants with my eyes but only for a second before my head shot back and I gasped at the feel of my fingers pressing against my clitoris. Gulp. Um... Wow.

I quickly slid my fingers under my underwear and ran them across my pussy with increasing speed, not even attempting to stop the moan that came from my lips. Okay that would have been way too embarrassing. No way I could have done that... Back then perhaps...

"Right." Edward nodded looking at anything but me. He was clearly as uncomfortable and he was turned on. "Well, I'll leave you to that then." Jerk.

"Oh please..." I panted over exaggerating my arousal for his benefit. "It's better with you here. Even if you wont touch me. Just looking at you makes turns me on." I almost begged him. Stay, stay, stay, please stay.

He paused, and then apparently decided, "No. I'm sorry Bella, you will have t deal on your own." Dammit.

"Now that's what I mean about neglect." I told him as he closed the door behind him.

I continued on for quite a while, teasing myself. After I'm not sure how long, I eventually ended up naked sliding my fingers in and out of myself and moaning far more than was necessary.

I could feel it close now, my stomach tightened and I forced my hips into the air, attempting to create more friction at my centre. Imagining that it was Edwards cold fingers in place of my own I cried out in pleasure, letting my voice fill the large empty house. "Oh my god... Edward yes!" Like hell I would have been that loud, it would be far too embarrassing.

I was so caught up in my own little world of pleasure I didn't notice the door opening and closing until I was forced down onto my back with my arms pinned to my side looking into the lust filled eyes of Edward Cullen. YES! He came back! Why am I getting so wrapped up in this story?

"Do you not know how to be quiet?" He demanded breathing heavily. He's not the only one breathing heavily.

I closed my eyes and inhaled his cool, sweet scent. I do love that smell."Not when thinking about you no." I told him before opening my eyes to see his crazed expression as his eyes traveled down realising my complete lack of clothing.

He closed his eyes for a minute not moving while he thought carefully about what he was doing. I couldn't help but roll my eyes at that, that is exactly what he would do. "Don't move." His calm voice eventually ordered me. "Please. Just don't say anything that will make me realise exactly what I am about to do. And above all stay very, very still." Without opening his eyes his lips descended and engulfed mine. This seems promising.

His cold lips only seemed to encourage the fire in my body as he released my hands to gently cup my breast. His kisses trailed gently down my neck until I felt his breath between my breasts. His hand released me and trailed down from my chest and across my stomach. I whimpered at the loss in contact, but that turned into a gasp as his lips took its place gently caressing my nipple. I tried to stay still but I couldn't help my back from arching upwards as his fingers arrived at their destination between my thighs. Um... Wow... That is all that is going through my head right now, just... Wow.

A growl erupted from Edwards throat Hehehe. I did not just giggle at that. and around my nipple, exciting me all the more, but none the less I held myself as still as I could. He switched breasts as he began slowly thrusting two fingers inside me. I failed to bite back a moan before giving in and panting "Oh Edward. Yes... God yes... Don't stop." If this would have worked then WHY THE HELL DID I NOT TRY THIS?!

His fingers pumped harder in and out of me and the fire in my veins increased tenfold. My stomach tightened and my words unintelligible, I could feel myself thrashing around and gave up trying not to. Edward raised himself from my breasts and curled his fingers inside of me. That was my undoing. He pressed his lips to mine, swallowing my scream of pleasure as I came. Oh wow... That is hot.

We drew apart and I smiled at him through my exhaustion. "That was amazing Edward." I told him ignoring his expression of both arousal and shock. "Would you like me to repay the favor?" I asked him sweetly.

He looked at me our faces still inches apart, and his erect member pressing against my naked thigh. "Um..." He hesitated and I couldn't help but smile at his reaction. "No, best not." In a flash he was gone and I didn't even bother trying not to laugh at him. He may have lost control for a moment but he was still a gentleman, and was most likely berating himself for his actions. I can't help but laugh just knowing that that is exactly what Edward would have done

I curled up under the blankets and within a few minutes Edward was back. Holding me in his arms I could tell he had dealt with his "problem" before returning, and I chuckled sleepily before falling asleep in his arms.

Well that was just... WOW! I need to go find Edward and see how well that would work right now.

Writers Note: This was just an experiment, to see how people would react to this. It should be even more fun to see how the characters would react to slash fiction. If I get positive feedback to this story I will start asking other authors if I can write the characters reviewing their stories, if I get negative feedback I may take this down. Requests are welcomed.

~SophieAngel69