Hey everyone, this is my first fanfic commentary, my comments will be in bold. Ever since discovering My Immortal, I've wanted to do a commentary on it, and now I seem to have that chance. And quite honestly, I don't know that much about Harry Potter. I hope you like this commentary!

Since the "author" never bothered, I will do a disclaimer. I do not own Harry Potter or this story, and neither did the original author.

Chapter 1.

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik)(No, I don't get it) 2 my gf (ew not in that way)(Wasn't thinking about that) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin(Beiber? Well, that explains a few things) ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!(I don't care)

Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way(What did she do to piss her parents off?) and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name)(Yes, because all babies are born with hair like that) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears(That's not even possible)and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!).(I guess I'm staying then)I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie.(Ew, incest alert!)I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white.(And I sparkle in the sun as well! Because, you know, I'm a Twilight vampire!)I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England(Scotland, dummy) where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth(I never would have guessed) (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there.(Didn't Hot Topic sell Fosters Home For Imagainary Friends stuff? That's not goth. PREP!) For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots.(A disaster waiting to happen) I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation(But you said you were pale...) black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining(It's called sleet)so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.(Charming)

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!(Oh boy...)

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly.(*facepalm*)

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.(Best. Line. EVER! XD)

AN: IS it good?(Nope!)PLZ tell me fangz!

So again, this is my first fanfic commentary up on this site, and I'm a little nervous about it. Please R&R, and I'll be back with more stupidity soon!