Author Note - Sekirei Chronicles

Okay guys, this is in response to some criticisms that this story has been getting. A lot of the criticism has been pretty good, helping me identify some issues that I never noticed while original writing this story.

A lot of spelling errors, broken sentences and just very weird crap I did not explain.

Then there were just some really bad choices like not letting Minato show his willingness to save Ikki from the lightning twins and then having Ikki thank him for it.

Just really dumb crap like that

That being said, there are a lot of criticism that really don't make any sense at all or they make sense, it's just that people don't research this stuff often so when I didn't explain it fully, I made an unnecessary mistake.

Let's go over those weird criticisms.

I think the biggest problem is that Naruto doesn't feel like he's lived almost 3000 years. His mind is still as fresh as if just yesterday he'd faced the Juubi and Madara. He hadn't changed at all since the ninja days, his style is the same, the world and time hadn't taught him anything, it's like he just walked around the globe with his ears plugged and his eyes blindfolded.

Me: I wanted to show that while Naruto is mature, he has not changed all that much with his basic personality.

My Naruto wasn't ever alone so after he finally got himself together, he pretty such just acts like a more mature version of his former self.

Never being alone, kept Naruto from becoming so jaded to the point where he seems unrecognizable from his previous self.

You can tell in the story that Naruto pretty much looks at people and even the sekirei girls as children, but he never sees them as children in a condescending way.

I still have a few gripes here and there with your inconsistency. Homura was still a guy...I repeat. Still A GUY back then. Even if 'his' breasts started to form. 'He' was still a male Sekirei. The way you switch between he/she/him/her is not very nice...not very nice at all. Keep with ONE GENDER until the time where he actually changes to a female through a successful winging.

Honestly, this one I can see I am in the wrong here, because I was trying to show that Homura fluctuate between genders, to show that he could be anything at any time, but using he/she/it isn't the proper way for this.

If I had known a little bit more, I would have addressed Homura as "They" just to be a bit more concise.

you make Naruto into some sort of overachiever and that tends to get annoying. Read Ashikabi no Shinobi, there Naruto is an overpowered being but still makes mistakes from time to time.

Of course, my Naruto is an overachiever, unlike Ashikabi no Shinobi, my Naruto isn't so jaded that he doesn't have his shit together and I am conveying a god verses Ashikabi's Naruto who is just a very powerful immortal human.

My Naruto isn't constantly fighting himself to stay hidden from the world because, he was never alone in this world to begin with.

When my Naruto was burned by humanity and just life in general, he had a family to fall back on and get him through those times.

My Naruto has also not stay away from humans before coming to Shinto Teito

So yes, my Naruto is vastly different from Ashikabi no Shinobi's.

T.b.h. the only thing I don't understand about these types of stories where Naruto is in the future and a few thousand years old at that... IS that you would think that quit a few ppl would know who he really is... you got to remember that Miko guy should of heard of Naruto accomplishments from thousands of years ago.. it's like King Tut of Egypt we hear of him thousands of years later cuz of his accomplishments but ppl doesn't recognize Naruto from beating the Juubi thousands of years in the past? lol

Honestly, I love this comment in the reviews because I had always been planning to show that people in this day and age actually do know that Naruto exists, it's just that the powers that be keeps his god like greatness from the media and also if Naruto can moon eye Tsukiumi, he could erase himself from people's memories easily.

Also, while Naruto believes that he is several thousands of years old, he is even older than that.

Your author note about pairing Minato with a female bijū... You literally had Seiken say they intended to get impregnated by Naruto, and Chomei declare her love for him in a manner that everyone could feel it. Unless you intend the female bijū to also have male harems, this simply would not make sense.

Again, this is my fault here, because when I said pair him up, I meant something else and I just accidently wrote this over the paragraph I was originally talking about his harem, because of an issue with my old laptop.

Typing problems cause issues, a lot back in the day.

The Paring I was talking about was paring as a sponsor, because I wanted to give Minato a small power boost and I wanted Minato to see Naruto's sister like an aunt so that if I made Naruto get together with Minato's mother, it wouldn't feel weird.

Gonna be honest this is the first chapter I didn't like. Yes, its ma the forced marriage. FORCED being the key word. Not only that, but this came completely out of left field.

Of course, it's forced, it's supposed to be out of left field because introducing these characters who helped Naruto at the tale end of his depression needed to have an impact as to why they are here.

It was also to establish that Kurama and Naruto's relationship is that from brother who troll each other.

As I stated Kurama is the person who signed for Naruto to get married, Naruto didn't do it himself.

Wow, this story sure went to shit. Which is saying something, considering how bad it was from the start.

Also, how did Miya go from "secret lover" to "matriarch of the harem" when she and Naruto never actually did anything together. They got interrupted every time they even tried to kiss, and the only time he seemed to spend alone with her was them just kind of cuddling. None of that means they're "secret lovers".

But then this entire story is lazy, poorly-written, autistic bullshit so I'm not really surprised. What a waste of time.

First of all, it was pretty bad due mostly in part to my own fault I will not deny.

Second, Miya is the only one of the girls who was given a gift that is absolutely priceless if you know the history of how royals do engagements, usually the suiters would bring gifts as a way to show off their wealth and status.

You ever wonder why Aladdin was shown to have all that crap when he was introduced as Prince Ali?

Why do you think the Queen of Sheba brings a caravan of valuable gifts for the Israelite King Solomon?

You actually have to read about courtship between royalties, so I can not fault anyone from knowing this and in hindsight I should have explained this.

In My story I mentioned that Naruto was a Daiyokai (Great demon) which means a Daimao Yokai or a Lord of Yokai and his gift was an ornamental sword with his fang graphed to it, along with his own blood.

Demons do not do that just gives these things without a meaning, and Miya knew what the meaning is as she did kiss him for it.

Also, if you read it again, you will know that Naruto called Miya his lady.

And as for Miya and Naruto not doing anything, anybody who only believes that romance can be conveyed by physical contact, well I let them be.

But anyway, considering Miya has been courted as if she was royalty, since Naruto sees her as his equal and since she accepted his proposal, she is the matriarch of Naruto's harem.

I have to disagree with Miya being Kage level.

There is far more to being as powerful as a Kage than having Kage level chakra reserves. Kage can level entire ninja villages with a single attack. Jōnin can obliterate entire armies of non-ninja. Villages have hundreds of Jōnin (well, the major villages do). What does that tell you about how freakishly powerful Kage are? Think about it, when Miya was on the Disciplinary Squad, it took the entire squad to defeat a small task force of conventional armed forces. A Jōnin could do that with a single move (hell, Zabuza literally did it and Kakashi would have done it if not for an enemy Jōnin countering his Jutsu with the same one).

That proves that, since it took an entire squad (lead by Miya) to do what a single Jōnin could easily do, Miya is well below Jōnin level. At least in terms of how much of her power she can actually use. Having Kage level reserves is useless if you are biologically incapable of ever using more than chunin amounts of it at a time. Though it would help with stamina.

This is a common misconception of the series as people actually think that the entire squad needed to stop the invading Army.

This is false considering the squad was made because Minaka just wanted to show how overwhelming a group of six super soldiers could be against normal human military.

It was shown in the first part of the manga that it only ever took two to deal with an army and those two are not even remotely on Miya's level. (Yume and Karasuba.)

A casual speed from a sekirei is being Massively Hypersonic + as it was shown that the likes of Musubi and Kusano could react to and dodge for defend again orbital space lasers.

Meaning that it really only takes one sekirei to destroy an entire army with no difficulty whatsoever.

Miya being able to completely blitz Karasuba in the manga means that Miya is far faster than Massively Hypersonic, she is practically sub-relativistic in speed.

Also let me remind people that Miya casually sunk battleships with a mere swing of her sword.

Zabusa could not do even remotely what Miya did.

Also, there is the fact that Miya has control of Kouten an advance alien spaceship that can move through space at beyond light speeds.

If Miya wanted to, she could end the world in a day.

Stop sleeping on Miya.

This is interesting but saying that Naruto hasn't been with a woman in 3,000 years seems a bit ridiculous. I'm saying this as a widow of 2 years. Plus, his memories of people and happenings thousands of years ago wouldn't be so fresh. If he has been living and functioning for thousands of years then he learned to let go and move on long ago.

Naruto is a god and a universal sage, who has reach enlightenment.

He can go a millennium without having sexual encounters and he wasn't even in the third dimension.

This is the difference between a human and a god.

.3950: I have to say, I'm actually rather happy this hasn't been updated in over a year because your spelling and Quotation usage is rather bad. I don't know whether to assume you're either dyslexic, or that English isn't your main language (either would explain the spelling errors). However, the quotation errors that can't be explained away by those, also Taki is only a support type meaning she can only create mists she can't fight in any shape or form from what I gather. Also considering Mikogami's views the Sekirei as things to collect I highly doubt he'd realize Yomi was deactivated.

First off, ouch that really hurts. I am no dyslexic, I just am really bad at checking any errors that all stories have, that is why writers normally hire editors.

Also, I know how Taki's power works in the series, and so I was forced to tweak it due to Akitsu not being on Mikogami's side.

I mean come on that just common sense.

Funny enough, he isn't the only one calling my dyslexic. That is a serious disposition that yet rude people just use it to insult others without taking into account how bad that is.

Menouthis: Are you autistic or maybe dyslexic? The amount of errors in your writing is staggering.

Also, are you a furry? You seem strangely obsessed with weird animal crap. It reminds me of my sketchy ex-girlfriend.

I don't think this person knows the difference between a furry someone obsessed with animal characters with human characteristics, and me a person who has knowledge of Yokai culture and bases his characters on that.

Sonicdude8: Not sure if you can call her Tsundere just yet, considering that would imply that she likes him, which currently she doesn't. There only reason she seems so flustered now is because the reaction to her Ashikabi. She doesn't have personal feelings towards him... yet.

She is a tsundere since she isn't being truthful about her feelings in regards to men.

Tsukiumi problem in regards to men are that she believes they want to have sex with her and being a virgin, she is shy about it.

Rickjames196: Kaho dun fuck around hahaha. Naruto is so nice, made Miya then Tessaiga hahaha. Hey, he is a wolf daiyoukai, so it really is the Tessaiga xD.

Sorry buddy, but that isn't Tessaiga, though the concept is there. XD

Well any that is most of the comments that I feel needed to be addressed.

The other ones are just people saying a have a lot of errors and I agree with this so I see that as good criticism

Also, would like to that those who pointed out weird stuff that actually was bad.

Others are just funny or are just people supporting me. Love those by the way.

The series will be reworked pretty soon I just need to take each chapter and make some fixes and reposed.

Don't know if I will just make a remake while only keeping the previous one open until I am completely caught up, or just rework each chapter individually.

Tell me what you guys think. Leave your reviews on this was well.

Well I will see each of you guys next time.