Okay so I wanted to write the after effects of a sugar high. (also from true events) I know it's short.

Bpov

Renesmee slowly opened her eyes. She winced at the light. Glancing around, she noticed that she was in her bedroom. When did I get here. She looked down and was surprised to see a candy wrapper in her hand. Whoa, when did I have candy. She thought. She realized that she had a terrible headache. She lay back down. Maybe I'll just sleep it off. She thought as she rolled over slipped back into a deep sleep.

In another room, Edward chuckled with his arms wrapped around me. I smiled and said, "Well, at least she knows the consequences of sugar."

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