CH9: Younha – Te wo Tsunaide

Commentary:

Ah, well, I'd like to keep this short. Overall, I was somewhat pleased with the outcome of this fanfic. There were a few chapters I felt that could have used a lot of improvement (esp. CH6). I also felt at times I made Mori a little too…soft. But maybe that's just me.

A little comment about the twins' personalities. I purposely made Hikaru seem weaker/Kaoru seem stronger for 2 reasons: 1) Hikaru is not as mentally stable/emotionally stable as his brother, as evidenced in that one manga chapter where Kaoru talks to Haruhi about Hikaru and 2) the slight role reversal erased their stereotypes. Hope the slight out of characterness at times didn't upset too many people.

Now Hunny. Hunny was a somewhat major character in this fiction (bigger than what I had intended him to be in the beginning). But it seemed I gave him a bigger role at the last moment. I noticed after I finished writing that I didn't do Mori's and Hunny's relationship much justice. I barely touched on Mori's undying devotion to him…so I'm sorry if you were bothered by that flaw.

Tamaki…well Tamaki is Tamaki. Not a lot of focus on him. Or Haruhi either. Or Kyouya. Oh well.

I'm not sure if people caught onto this, but the whole point of CH8, or at least the first part, was to solidify the fact that KaoruXMori's relationship was actually "forbidden". As in, despite how the people closest to them accept it, they still have to keep it hidden from society. I was hoping it continued the whole theme of "things left unsaid" but in the end, I guess I made it a bit vague.

Cheers!

END "The Things Left Unsaid"