4 reviews! -gasps- that seriously the most i ever got on the 1st chappie! i usually get one or two and then it builds up.
thank you: Liselle129, Deamon Fire(and yes zuko does!), NeoKynko-Zero, and Firebenderbianca!those peoples are awsome for reviewing.
Ok, in this chapter, there are some various little example stories i made up in between the critiziam! they are not actually from someone's story! if your story is namesd what i named the examples, sorry, but i didn't take it out of your story! anystory examples of stories in here... i made up!
Chapter 2: attack of the OCs
Today i asked The Avatar crew ask to sit and judge... judge original characters.
The first person stood infront of the crew "Hello my name is Shamikala-"
"HALT!" yelled zuko, "What the hell is with these made up names, if your going to have a name ATLeAST make it real! Preferably of some sort of Asian Orgin."
Shamikala narrowed her eyes, "FINE! MY name is Mei-yu. I am a begger on the streets-"
"O.k. what's with all you OCs being beggers these days, who has a job anymore? Lemme just take a wild guess...you have no familly," katara guessed, "I don't want to be paying welfare for you!"
Shamika stormed off, holding her head up high.
"NEXT!" shouted haru, still eating that "dangerous" turkey sandwich, oh wait, now he's wrapping it neatly and saving it for later.
"Hello all, my name is Tao." tao flipped back her beutiful blonde hair, and wore tight clothes that revieled her slender figure. She had beutiful blue eyes that-
"GRR IM SICK OF ALL YOU DAMN PERFECT PRETTY...AND PERFECT GIRLS!" suki screamed,
frowning at the mirror.
"I wish that for once...JUST ONCE!...there would be an OC that was fat, ugly, and stupid and have no idea how to flirt!" suki exploded
Suddenly there was a knock on the door.
"Who is it?" aang called out
"Wan-li, here for the OC annalysis,"
"Hehe her name is Wan-li...that means pretty as a flower in chinese...DAMN SHEs GONNA BE HOt!" jet smiled, rubbing his little hands together, popping his collar.
THe door slowly creeks open. All the men drooled in a anicipation, suki started to cry, but suddenly they all gasped as a significantly overweight girl, with giant boils all over her face walks in. She opened her mouth to smile and she only has a few teeth.
"i think your cute too, Jet," she said, giggling, licking her lips
Sokka lights on fire.
"Ok you can leave now...NOW!" jet yells, shielding his eyes
"The poor thing," suki said, but couldn't help smiling.
"Bring in the benders, that don't know there benders, or don't want to tell us there benders,
or-" aang was cut off
"WE GET THE POINT!" everyone yelled
A line of various Ocs. They form a neat row in front of the panel.
"Ok...let's start with uhh..YOU!" zuko says pointing to a girl with short blonde hair
"Well, I am like the last airbender...GIRL!" she shouted, flailing her arms in the air
"Sorry, but the show is more...well unique if all of his people are let's saying 'missing' at the time being" katara stated, folding her arms. Aang frowned
"Yeah, they're alllllllllll dead..." sokka said, taking a sip of water. Aang was now in tears
"Hahaha you have no one left to go to!" zuko said, pointing his finger at aang, sticking out his tounge.
Aang grinned, "Well, at least my family loved me," now it was zuko who was crying.
aang began to say"But to tell you the truth, I dont wanna'nother airbender. Because in the stories they are: always having serious mood swings-"
CUT TO an "EXAMPLE STORY" ENTITLED "NOT THE LAST ONE"
"So where are you from," katara asked, smiling at the girl
Yu Jie thought for a second, "From uhh, Omashu, yeah it's great there!" she lied
Katara smiled, "We're actually heading there in a few days, why don't you come along, and we can meet your family," she suggested
An grew angry, "YOU JUST DON'T GET IT! DON'T TALK ABOUT SOMETHING YOU KNOW NOTHING ABOUT!" Yu Jie yelled, starting to cry.
Katara and sokka exchanged confused glares, "Uhh, is there something we should know"
asked sokka
"NO! uhh i was just, uhh practicing my acting!"
"Oh ok. Well we are going to camp here tonight!" katara said
"Great i'll stay!" said Yu Jie
"And we're havin' fresh boar!" sokka announced, showing Yu Jie the large piece of meant he had captured.(airbenders are vegeterians)
"HOW CAN YOU FEED ME THIS? YOU HORRIBLED PEOPLE...YOU JUST DON'T UNDERSATAND"
she said, storming out of the campsite
Katara followed behind, "What's wrong?" she asked, comforting Yu Jie who was now crying
"Sorry, i guess all of this is just...i can't say," yu jie commented
"Please tell me,"
"Forget it," she reasurred,
Yu Jie forced herself to eat the meat. She grimmaced as the flavor soaked into her mouth.
"Delicious!" she lied, shoving more boar down her throat
Sokka belched. "O.k., who wants to tell scary stories?" sokka asked
Yu Jie frowned, "YOU KEEP DOING THESE THING...YOU JUST DON'T GET IT!" she yelled
"uhhh never mind? How about cardS? sokka said, fearfully
"Ohh goody! i love cards!" exlaimed Yu Jie
CUT BACK TO PANEL
"And they always are stronger than me and well...I WANNA BE THE LAST ONE!" he whinned,
pouting like a little kid.
The next benderstood up. She was mysterious looking, with dark brown hair, that flowed over one of her eyes.
"My name, i have none, so people just call me "wind," i am a rebel, from the firenation" she said releasing a ball of flames into the air.
Zuko sighed, "Ok..wind...just make up a name! Like seriously...how can you not have a name-"
CUT TO STORY, "ON THE RUN FROM WHO I AM"
Zuko snarled, "Get off my ship!" shoving the teen, roughly her age to thte ground.
"Please, I've got know where to go," she begged
"What's your name dearie," iroh interjected
"wind..." she said, in her bloodstained clothes
zuko started laughing histarically ,"WIND! Is that the best you can come up with. How about i name you 'best buy', or 'listerine' or 'video on demand'." he said cracking up, "oh i saw your sister, gust, today! and dowpour, and 'i have a sucky name'." he could not stop laughing
CUT BACK TO PANEL
After hours and hours of critizing OCs, the crew came up to the last one. She had had to suffer through ALLLLL of the vigerious and rather obnoxious comments of the various crew members.
"O.k, tell us your story," zuko said, getting ready to make fun of her
she siged, "You know what? I'm not going to be like everyone else who says they are like no one else. My name is Xue. I have a mother, a father, an older brother. I live in a middle class village, in the earth kingdom. I am an earthbender, and I really should have nothing to complain about. In the fanfiction world, I am a minority. My only problem is that I dream of the future,
I see things that have not yet happened. Yet, if I tell someone, who knows what i'll do to the timeline. So I look at my family, I see their smiling faces, I hear them talk about 'the world of tommarow, when the war will be over,' and i frown. I am a minority." she stated
The crew all sat there. Their mouths gaped wide open.
"The perfect OC," the all gasped
"LOCK UP YOUR CHILDREN!" sokka yelled, as they all ran around like maniacs
"It's the apocolips!" katara yelled. Everyone was sceaming and it was mad chaos.
"Im gonna...leave..now," Xue said, inching towards the door, her face twisted with fear.
AFTER THEY CALMED DOWN
"Well to sum up today's review-"katara began to say but was cut off by Jet.
"NO UGLY CHICKS!" jet yelled, raising his arm in the air. We all glare at him and attack,k yelling "YOU SEXIST PIG!"
NEXT CHAPTER: THEY DISCUSS "WHEN YOUR SUCKED INTO THE AVATAR WORLD"
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